Life Starts Now - Comments

I think it has an interesting basis and I can't wait to read more! However, although the great amount of detail is great, it feels a little to listed. Like a huge information dump.

I forgot to mention. You've got such wonderful paragraphs and grammar. Its amazing I'm no good with grammar in English but its so up lifting to read a story like this. Seriously amazed by your writing, like I said before. I hope to read up through all of your posted chapters by the weekend but I've got 10 stories to read but this is at the top of my list :)

(Comment Swap brought me here.) I can't wait to read more. I've only read through the first chapter but I reallylove how detailed it is. I hope to read through all the chapters by the weekend

I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter! I really like how you give the background on every character. The first chapter is very detailed and creative! Keep up the good work! Could you check out my story?

I am actually looking for a new really good hockey story to read so im so excited to be reading this! i love the pittsburgh penguins! you're writing style is so creative and there is something about it that captivates me when i read each chapter! keep up the amazing writing! Im loving this story! and thanks for giving me something great to read

I'm sorry... you've got a Flyers fan here brought to you by comment swap. I'm going to stick to comments on your writing, because otherwise this won't be pretty, hehe.

For starters, the whole first 'chapter' could really be woven into the actual story, mentioning characters and background and opinions when said things are introduced in the storyline, rather then throwing them all at the reader at once. It's a lot of information to take in right away, and doesn't give much of a reason to come back. (Is it necessary to give even the parents' middle names? I just don't see how that information is relevant to your story...)

Good for John ;)

Other than that, the idea if cute and it's actual kind of neat hearing about a place I live close to :)

Good luck with the rest! :)

Love the first chapter so far! Subscribing so I can definitely finish reading it later! You have a way with words and detail that I envy!

Love the first chapter so far! Subscribing so I can definitely finish reading it later! You have a way with words and detail that I envy!

I really like the title and you have a really good summary.
You should think about making a custom layout to make your story more unique and appealing to readers.
You have a really good plot and I really like your characters, too!
I'm not a Penguins fan, so that was different, but I still thought your story was good!

I really like the title and you have a really good summary.
You should think about making a custom layout to make your story more unique and appealing to readers.
You have a really good plot and I really like your characters, too!
I'm not a Penguins fan, so that was different, but I still thought your story was good!

I really like the title and you have a really good summary.
You should think about making a custom layout to make your story more unique and appealing to readers.
You have a really good plot and I really like your characters, too!
I'm not a Penguins fan, so that was different, but I still thought your story was good!

I really like the title and you have a really good summary.
You should think about making a custom layout to make your story more unique and appealing to readers.
You have a really good plot and I really like your characters, too!

I fell in love with this story as soon as I saw it was about the Pittsburgh Penguins. Please keep writing!

I absolutely love all time low, and this story is pretty great!! it's another one of those stories that just suck you in, I've been (luckily) encountering a lot of those stories lately!
this has a good storyline, a storyline that keeps me interested. the only thing I would maybe work on is proof reading before you post. I've spotted a few grammatical errors here and there. it isn't a huge deal, but it'll make your story look better.. if that makes sense lol :-)
pretty please keep writing and update soon :-) you have a good story here!
I can't wait to read more of what you have to offer for this awesome story! lol :-) you're a good writer, and sometimes it can be hard to find one of those!
P.S. I think it's time for me to subscribe... :-)

((sorry for posting twice, my comment got cut off))

I really agree with TiredOfCountingSheep, and how you set up the first chapter as a background for the main character. for me, and probably for most, learning the background and life and attributes of the main character is definitely an important thing, and it really does help to really envision the main character. sadly, lots of writers forget to do things like that, which can be a bit annoying. but trust me, you didn't disappoint. You've got a good writing style, and props to you for giving background AND using proper grammar! you've got a good story going, and I hope you keep up with it--I think a lot of people do! :-) - Olivia <3

Deff looks like this story is one of the best story ever. You write in a beatiful way, well define caracters and also really good ideas for the plot. I'm gonna try to keep up with this. Please update soon and congratz on the story.

Great first chapter. I love how it sets out what her life is about and who she is. It really lets me get a feel for the character and feel how she is feeling. I am looking forward to continuing on with reading this.

update soon please :)

Please update soon I m in love with this story!

Update Pleaseee! (: