She would be dead if she drank that much. At 5'2 there is no way she would be out on that dance floor after a few minutes, not even after an hour. She would have been drunk after the first five shots. But that many shots, that fast would have landed her in the hospital. But other than that, I like your story and character. She seems like such a sweet girl, I thought the fake id and underage drinking were a bit out of character though. I guess there is a lot about her I don't know. Lol. Her and Jordan are very cute together.
I'm going to read this after I comment, but your writing is a giant block! I suggest you tabin the beginning of each paragraph, and you should press "enter" between each paragraph because the very first chapter is a giant block, and that always makes the reader zone out, and of course you don't want that! Anyways....I'm going to go read the actual story! :D