The In-Betweeners - Comments

Haha he's so shy :)

Gah, I was wondering where this story went. I had cleared my subscriptions list and it disappeared. It's still as brilliant as it was the first time I read it. I feel awful because this is such a terrible comment but when I'm not so scatterbrained I would really love to fully review this entire thing.

But for now...

I agree with Gabby on your main character. The fact that he is so damn relatable is key to the brilliance of this, but your vocabulary and detail is just fantastic. gay badcommentisbad

I'm glad I wasn't a lazy reader today.

If I was... I probably wouldn't have bothered to read this. /shrugs.

But then again, I said I was glad, right? I really did enjoy reading this, it's got something that kept me reading. I don't know what but if you continue to write more, I'm hoping to find out. Also, the layout is striking. Stunning, really. ^^ Oh & some parts of the story made me laugh out loud, and I have no idea why.

"That girl is a bitch because of all those moments she spent plotting her schemes to get back at those other bitches. "

^
Yeah, I laughed at that. o.o

'till the next update, :D

I love this.
Wow.
A really good idea for a story, also.
You have a new reader <3

I thought the title was different and I wanted to see what it was like. This story isn't something that I'd read usually, but it was nicely done.

I must say as of right now, I don't like the banner. I don't understand why you have it the way it is, but soon enough I will. I don't like the layout either and I usually read the stories because the layout is nice (and the summary too), but I read and liked it.

I never understood how those cliques came to be. What made a jock a jock? What made the emos emo? What made a nerd a nerd? Obviously there were visible defining factors between these cliques. The jocks were brawny, the emos wore black, the nerds’ backs were hunched from carrying so many textbooks in their backpacks. But why? The summary was interesting, so I wanted to read more. I don't like cliques at all, but I still wanted to read more. I wanted to see how you would answer the questions or what you would do.

I think silk tea., a.k.aBillie, said something truthful. I don't know Scott Westerfield is, other than that, I thought the same. I have a short attention span so I might read this story, then quit. But try to read it again. I was intrigued, but my a.s is very short. Regardless, I liked it.

I know a few people who use great vocabulary. You are one of them. I liked it a lot. I thought you did good. It was a great experience. Keep up the work, and I might read more later.

I just have to say one thing. Your writing is beautiful. Something about it intrigues my short attention span. I've only read the first chapter, though. I have to say I want to read more. I want to learn more about this Shane.

I'm looking forward to reading this. I will subscribe. :]

It's not becoming boring at all!
I still love it and can't wait to see what happens as it moves along.
=D

I love this, still.
I love the detail and just how...different it is.
<3

I'm excited to learn a little bit more about Shane. She's a mystery to me and I'm curious as to why she shows no emotion. I have some theories but I could be totally wrong haha

I enjoyed reading this story. The banner is really awesome! The summary is very interesting, I found myself wanting more and more after each chapter. I really like your writing style. You don't use too much description. But I still like it. Please Keep writing. :)

OMG! I loved this chapter. Why? I don't know. Haha. And, ah, poor James I guess. The odd kid from the family. There's always got to be one of those. Update soon! :D

The summary and layout:
The summary was informational and interesting and I really liked how you ended it. I think it gave just the right amount of detail and info and I wouldn’t really change a thing. (: The layout is cute and simple as well as the banner.

The first chapter:
Well, this made me smile because it’s really relatable. It’s well written and funny (in my mind.) and it’s just great by my terms. It made sense to me, and again, it already sets me up to adore this story.

The second chapter:
Oh my god, I just love people and characters like Shane. I want to be like that but I care all too much of what people think and things like that. I was a bit confused because at first I imagined the main character a girl, but it adds a twist. (:

The third chapter:
That’s the reason I like history too. (: James could be my twin in the way that we think, haha. I love this so far.

Chapter four:
I like where this is going. Shane is sort of becoming a bit of a bitch to me; does she care about James as a friend? I hope so. (:

Just subscribed <3

This is probably the best story I have read on here so far. You write beautifully and the plot so far is lovely.

Wow,
That was really amazing.
I love the summary, it really made me wont to read more. It didn't give alot away which is good.
Love the layout
The plot sounds very interesting, I like it. This is very different which I like very much.
I only got to read the first chapter because my computer is being stupid.
But I will read more later, and do another comment :)

I really like the stream of consciousness thing going on. I do it too - but it's really different from yours. Mine is meant to sound like the babble from one's mind, yours actually sounds like a story. So technically yours really isn't the same as mine at all..I think there's another name for yours.

Anyways, I really loved the ways you grouped people and got more in depth as to why the jocks do what they do and so on. It's a neat way to look at things if you've got time. The girl telling this story really seems to think of things on a different level and I like that a lot. You find it in a lot of stories, but sometimes certain ones stand out more than others.

I think you've got a good thing going here.

Layout and Summary:

The layout background is very pretty but a little distracting. I like the black and white theme.

I love your definition of normal and how you explain what it really means in the paragraph.

I like how your character claims she is normal. That she isn’t one weirdo oddball who is trying to fit in like a lot of other stories. It’s an original twist.

Chapter One:

I love the thoughts in this story describing what your character thinks of normality and high school. I like Shane so far, she seems very fun. If I had to guess, I’d say your character was a boy? I couldn’t really tell, even at the end where it talks about dating girls. I think this story is a good idea, and your writing is wonderful. I can’t wait to read more!

The summery I love because I have a major dislike to the word normal. The first chapter I thought it was a girl, haha. I really like Shane and I'm looking forward to reading more.

Of all the names in the world, I was not prepared for James.

I have to say, I don't relate to him much. I'm not a wall flower in the correct sense, but seeing as most "normal" kids in my school are eccentric, I could be determined as one of the normal-er ones.

I love this story. I felt like I was in his mind, which is a good place to be for a reader. It wasn't overly described, yet it was detailed enough that I understood how he thought. I love his character. I love loaners, haha.

This was really well done. =)

I totally LOVED your intro!! and your layout!! WIN!! :)

Update soon please! :O

So, your layout is a bit distracting but I like how you started this out. It makes me think a lot. I don't really get a lot of high school stories, I guess not going to a regular high school has a bit to do with that. I'm really looking forward to reading the rest of this though. Your descriptions were really good, a bit repetitive in the beginning, but it didn't really draw away from the excellence of your writing (: