June 16th, 2011 at 01:59am
i really love this layout/banner :)
the first paragraph was a great hook for the story
it's something everyone can relate to, so good job on that :)
and you explained it and the confusion very well
aw poor Shane :( but i love that as a girl's name.
I don't believe with her in the God sense she is talking about,
but I do respect her opinion , and it adds to her character
very, very good beginning with a great hook :)
defenitly something that'll go far <3 great job!
The title seems really interesting.
I liked the last part of the summary, but I guess it wouldn’t make much sense without the first part. I thought the summary was kind of interesting, but too serious for something that’s tagged as a comedy.
Okay, the start of the first chapter does seem a little bit funny. I liked it. :)
I was a nobody who cared too much, she was a could-have-been-somebody that didn’t care. – I like this line
I think I like the second chapter better than the first because things seem to be coming together to form a story.
I like this story. It’s definitely different, but in a subtle way. Not like, in-your-face different. I think I’ll keep an eye on this one. Good job. :)