Neuropathy - Comments

I love this. :) <3
The layout and banner were amazing.
Your writing was so descriptive but got to the point.
And I also love how I've never read a story like this before. :)
I can't wait for more.

This is so true I know exactly how that is (from watching it happen with my mom except with different things). And I think I'll actually recommend it to her once you continue so that she can feel not so alone with the experience. I'm really glad you wrote this because I feel like it's a serious issue in the medical field that is over looked. It's like just because they don't know what to do they don't help at all or barley even try, preferring to help people that fall in to regular categories but thats stupid people like you and my mom need just as much if not more help then those with diseases people know how to make better or have already identified...... Yeah but nows not the time for that rant lol

Good story and I love it =] ... I'm sorry you were sick for so long though =/ stupid tick I hope it was squished.

The layout is nice, and the story was alluring. The last line was captivating.

Holy shit.
This was really, really good.
The summary was amazing. In every sense of the word.
Chapter one was just... wow.
<3 I'm subscribing.

I have to say, first off, that I absolutely love the layout you've created. The banner is really captivating.

Right off the bat, I could relate to this story… which I loved. The concept is very unique, and the style reminds me a bit of Chuck Palahniuk. “The pain is so unbearable; all you can do is lie down in bed under the covers, hiding your defeat from the world.” – I think that’s one of my favorite lines in the entry. Everyone feels that way sometimes, and you really captured the emotion in a beautiful way. I can definitely sense your depth in the passage, and sort of visualize how you must have been feeling. Your writing is very poetic and brilliantly laid out. Well done, indeed.

Also yes, I like the layout and picture. As well as the major description you give! :D

I love how the introduction was mostly description; describing the people around you, and explaining what is happening. My favorite part about the doctors, and their ways of diagnosing you.

So what would happen if they were to disappear? Like morning fog, they slowly wither away with the crowd, getting sucked into disappointment and unknowing.

This was probably the best line in the whole introduction. It is a wonderful comparison between fog and the people around you. I just love it, and this story.

One thing the medical teams have seemed to decide on: If our tests can't prove a real problem, it's the patient's fault. It's all in her head.

She's crazy, isn't she?

Beautiful ending for the long summary.
It disgusts me that doctors actually tell people that kind of stuff . . .

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To take a quote from the introduction would be too hard; I'd have to quote the whole thing. You have a really fantastic writing style. :)

I love how you built the process up. It starts as this . . . then it becomes this . . .
And, I love your descriptions about the pain. Each new sentence set a vivid description in my mind.

You feel like your entire body is on fire and this time, there’s no extinguisher.
You know, I will quote something. ^ A;ALKSDJFj; LOVE it. :D

Anyway, I think I'll subscribe to this because I like your writing and your idea.

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And, I'm really sorry you had to go through everything to get this inspiration. : \ I understand that people can make themselves sick, but for doctors to just assume that . . . without any real psychological proof. That's not cool.

Doctor after doctor is stumped; no one knows what to do or say.The first part; Doctor after doctor is stumped; – I feel like this is worded awkward. I think like maybe something: Doctors stutter at the thought of finding nothing; no one knows what to do or say. I’m not saying it’s horribly written, just sort of awkward. It gets the point across though.

Whether it be a mother, a father, a sister, a brother, any other family member, a best friend, a teacher, a spouse—anyone— – I like this sentence; not just this part but the thing as a whole, just I feel like any other family member shouldn’t be placed there, it felt off when I re-read it out loud to myself. I like it because yes, in reality family members, friends, or really anybody is there when you have the sniffles. It makes me feel like this part could be in fact real.

In such a big world with so many voices, how do you make it? – Loved the last sentence. It was placed in the perfect position, and it was a great way to end. I keep re-reading this part and it mesmerizes me.

Your layout and summary were really good. They hooked me in, for sure. This was very well written. I am really intrigued with how everything will play out. I love the way in which you described things, but the line that painted the best visual picture in my mind was:

You feel like you’re fighting a war with an unseen force..

For some reason this line just painted a clear picture in my mind of how real this pain was. I love this, and I love your style. I'm going to subscribe.

The layout seems pretty cool. Though the banner creeps me out a bit 0_o lol

I like the story idea, and it seems like something I would read. (since I just love reading things from Lauren McDaniel)

My favorite line: "If our tests can't prove a real problem, it's the patient's fault." That's kind of messed up, to say that it's the patient's fault. I mean, if they came to you, they truly have no idea what's going on =/

Like I said, I would love to read this, once you start posting; so update soon! <3