Death is Black and White - Comments

  • Elephant PJs

    Elephant PJs (365)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    New Zealand
    It is finished! Jeez I remember you telling me when you had the idea for this story and now it's over! It's been a fantastic ride. But I must say here (will reply to big comment later) but I don't think this needs a sequel. It's fine as a stand alone and the way it's ended simply leaves the reader to wonder what's happened but in full knowledge of what could? If that made any sense XD But yeah. Congratulations :)
    January 14th, 2012 at 05:23pm
  • BlazeRead

    BlazeRead (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    Woohoo! Yehaw! It's done and I love it a lot!
    January 9th, 2012 at 11:55pm
  • BlazeRead

    BlazeRead (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    EXPLOSION!! YOU DID IT! I'm proud to call you my friend hahaha. See you in school so I can tackle hug you to death :)
    January 3rd, 2012 at 04:02am
  • hello sunshine.

    hello sunshine. (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    United States
    You're story gave me chills, I love it so much! The ending was fantastic, not a thing could make it better. I'm going to end up re-reading the shit out of this one day. <3
    January 2nd, 2012 at 01:39am
  • Elephant PJs

    Elephant PJs (365)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    New Zealand
    Yeah. Okay. I really enjoyed that and you've pretty much covered all the questions I've had regarding Lotty/the White Lady. Fantastic. Keen to see what happens to Abby and Miranda though. I'll be saddened if either of them dies. Anyway, yes. Very, very good.
    December 30th, 2011 at 11:57pm
  • Elephant PJs

    Elephant PJs (365)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    New Zealand
    Fucking amazing <3
    December 30th, 2011 at 11:55pm
  • Elephant PJs

    Elephant PJs (365)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    New Zealand
    Okay. Firstly, THIS IS FUCKING INTENSE. Good job. Can tell the ending's close though :( Secondly: the first part of the chapter repeats itself. Thirdly: a couple of grammar things in this paragraph that really bugged me:

    "And by "we," I mean your body and I. You wanted to die anyway, right? Well this will be better. You're heart will still beat but i'll rip out your soul.

    You're should be your and the I'll should have a capital.
    December 27th, 2011 at 06:35pm
  • BlazeRead

    BlazeRead (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    Gyah!!! Yay! Finally! Exclimations! You'll finish! heehee... I'm done now. amaizing three chapters. It's like, so intense right now. :)
    December 23rd, 2011 at 07:35pm
  • Elephant PJs

    Elephant PJs (365)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    New Zealand
    Okay, totally looking forward to the NEXT chapter then ;) This one was good, as usual :) I'll just let the suspense build inside my head until your next update. It's gonna be great. I can tell.
    December 21st, 2011 at 08:32pm
  • BlazeRead

    BlazeRead (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    Gah! Dude! You have to update, like, every day to finish before christmas! My life is ruined :( haha jk. I'm glad you're taking your time with this. It's awesome as usual.
    December 20th, 2011 at 09:27pm
  • Elephant PJs

    Elephant PJs (365)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    New Zealand
    Well it certainly wasn't bad :P Thought something big was gonna happen and instead you just build it more...irritating! XD Haha.
    December 20th, 2011 at 09:06am
  • Elephant PJs

    Elephant PJs (365)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    New Zealand
    Why you thought this chapter is short is beyond me. It's informative and lets you know what's happening, lets you into Lydia's head (and perhaps someone else's) and sort of joins the story more. It eased the tension. And the length was perfect :) I liked it. I'm predicting something big in the next chapter ;) Well actually, I don't know, but this chapter felt like a bridge so there's my crystal ball gazing :P
    December 17th, 2011 at 05:48pm
  • BlazeRead

    BlazeRead (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    This comment is gunna suck cuz I'm not in a good mood, but A-W-E-S-O-M-E job on this chappy. I loved the awk-wierdness of the relationship haha. Good times. And FORSHADOWING! I win. Like total win. Awesome win winness. Yeaaaah.......... YAWN anyway. doop I hate Joshio's parental unetis! They stinkez like rickrolled........... ROADKILL BROWN.......... uhuh. K-blanco el boredo. Me no espeaky espanole blah can't spellz neither. Wow I got off topic, but I bet I made you laugh. Good detail, good plot, good, good, good, good. malfunction shutting down....
    December 12th, 2011 at 12:57am
  • Elephant PJs

    Elephant PJs (365)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    New Zealand
    Don't know why you are so hard on yourself...the only thing that bothered me was that you didn't finish the chapter on the conversation with Natalie. But at the same time, it keeps up the curiousity and suspense so yeah :) I liked it.
    December 1st, 2011 at 02:03am
  • BlazeRead

    BlazeRead (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    Kyah! Yay! I loved that :) oops... she kinda killed her...... her bad lol! Why do I find that so dang funny?
    November 30th, 2011 at 11:39pm
  • Elephant PJs

    Elephant PJs (365)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    New Zealand
    Awesome chapter. Honestly, best one yet. So excited for the next one! Lissi's kind of amazing.
    (slowly getting round to replying to you...sorry it's taken so long)
    November 29th, 2011 at 06:57am
  • BlazeRead

    BlazeRead (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    Update like, now! I wanna see the scene with Samantha!!!!!!!!! Now! and that's wasn't at all boring heehee I love the "twins" hahahaha...
    November 29th, 2011 at 03:18am
  • BlazeRead

    BlazeRead (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    Can lotty kill him please? I really don't like him.
    November 15th, 2011 at 02:25am
  • BlazeRead

    BlazeRead (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    Awe! Dude you rock my friggen socks :) Awesome chappy, but I'm still gunna desecrate lotty's drowning/burial site if she kills my beautiful blond nurse. No joke. I will destroy your ghost....
    October 28th, 2011 at 12:31pm
  • Elephant PJs

    Elephant PJs (365)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    New Zealand
    I'd love to know what the new girl knows, to be honest...
    October 28th, 2011 at 09:37am