Through the Flames - Comments

As everyone else has stated. Your writing is simply beautiful in this. The characters were believable and well developed; their emotions were conveyed effectively, believably, and powerfully. Although it was a sad piece (that ending especially was just gutting!) I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. There were a few errors that need correcting as follows:
He was never allowed to say what he wanted or do what he to do. - I imagine that was supposed to read "or do what he wanted to do."
Tom had reluctantly taken off his helmet in front of her and hebecame even more confused she didn’t flinch. - There should be a comma between "her" and "and". "He" and "became" accidentally smashed together, and also I think there should be the word "when" after "confused".
Tom didn’t knew how he managed it. -should be "Tom didn't know..."

Anywho, well done, dear. :)

I just wanted to say... holy shiz xD
That was really, really amazing <3 Everything about it was strong; the characters, plot, emotions... everything.
You, my dear, are quite talented

Okay, so when I first say this, I thought it was going to be about arson or something o.O I think it's because I saw - and really liked - the picture. But anyways, this is so, so sad. Poor Tom! There isn't just one part that's so sad about this one-shot, but the entire thing is just really sad. I mean, first, he gets burned and scarred and people laugh at him. Then he gets sent to the army and fights with the girl he loved. Then she dies. That's just so horrible and tragic; if that happened to me, I'd have a really hard time living. :/
Anyways, this was really lovely. Amazingly raw and emotional. I truly loved reading it <3

First of I have to get this out of my system: ARGH, ETHAN FROOOOOOME.

The story was so sad. :(
I also envy you for your writing talent. You make the words like magic.