Ancient Rivalry - Comments

Oh my, the tears. ;___;
Alketas is literally the cutest thing ever. Period.
But his mother dying... Oh Jesus, the floodgates.
Now I can nag you for updates.

Ah, sorry, I'm stupid and forgot to mention this before… the one bad thing about the story, in my opinion, is the color. The orange is way too bright and it looks all Halloween-y… I think you'd be better off just having the text be white, it's easier on the eyes.

I'm so excited to read the rest of this!! The prologue was awesome, you've portrayed Alketas like such a cute little boy, I love it when stories have accurate children. Even through his innocence you've managed to get some of the politics of the war in there too so people know what's going on. And his mother dying… that was heartbreaking. I can't wait to read more! Amazing job!

Ellen, this was so well written! I absolutely love it. I got so upset when Alketas' mother was killed. I hope that he's able to get some sort of revenge on those soldiers at some point.

This is fabulous and I seriously cannot wait for the next chapter. I'm excited to see where this goes :]

HISTORICAL FICTION OM NOM NOM.

I love it. Like, actually adore it. Historical ficion is rather hard to come across and even when it is found, it's never usually as far back as this. The prologue was amazing, but so tragic too. All of your characters were so realistic, and I especially loved how the mother acted as though she were pregnant to distract the soldiers from her son. It was so sad, but exactly what a mother would do to protect her child.

I can't wait to see where this goes. It's really, really brilliant. And I'm still squee'ing over the fact it's historical fiction. xD