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A7X Slash Contest Comment

layout; this layout is okay, but none of it's tied in together. mainly white banner, lots of pink in background and bright blue text? your other layout was so much nicer.

The first paragraph(?) ended on a funny note, stomach virus, Zack Vee; you silly. :P But again paragraphing is an issue but I won't dwell much on it here, I've already done that on the other one-shot.

I'm always impressed by the length of your one-shots though, I could never write so much. I like the way you told us about Zacky's thoughts, it had the cheekiness of a teenager so it didn't feel stale. I miss direct speech though, the story seems boring with all of it's conversations in indirect speech.

:L I'm laughing so hard, Zacky's so naive and obvious it's hard not to. I love your characterisation in this, he's very teenage-y and stupid at times. Oh god :L

I loved Brian's kidnapping, it was about time that they got together, really. <3 The finish was amazing; the contrast of Brian's character to Zacky's and the almost gentle way Brian lead him to his realization. They're in love. <333 You have great plots. :3

I loved this!! It was just like, OMS! Lol... You should so turn this into a story.. It would be so cute!

I loved this!! It was just like, OMS! Lol... You should so turn this into a story.. It would be so cute!

One word. PERFECT! :'D
I totally loved this story! :} Zacky all shy and Brian all sexy :3 hahaha they're just perfect :B
Great job!

I'm melting all over my keyboard! Incredibly cute! I just want to hold Zacky so much that I can't even stand the frustration caused by the knowledge that I can't! There is no way you're going to continue this one? It could be an amazing storyline! I would loved to read more of this. And just like the girl above, I'm brazilian, so... sorry for my spelling mistakes as well :P

Oh my God, I just melted. I mean, awwwn Zacky, Bri, you guys are so fucking cute together that I can't even handle it. lol Great story! :D (please, ignore my spelling mistakes, I'm brazilian and my english is not that good. lol)