OKay, I would love to go on, but the grammar and punctuation are just KILLING my eyes. it's a great story and I love it, and I think i see where you're going with this... but I'm sorry, I can't read more.Good job, though, and keep writing!
P.S.-- every computer has Word. And Google has a spell check. Just so you know.
I think that she should be with Parker. The chapter was really good. But don't let kadien die. And have him find someone fir example like at the hospital or something.