To begin with, I'm not really a Bieber fan. So when I was sent to this page by the comment swap, I was a little upset. BUT - when I began reading the story, I began to really enjoy it. It does seem a little repetitive because the main problem seems to be Justin. Add some more into it. Add more detail, but don't get too outrageous. Keep is at a happy medium and it will help the repetitive problem. If the problem is a character, don't let it hang on for too long because the story will get boring. Don't make the problem better suddenly, make it a step by step sorta thing. This story has a lot of potential, so keep up the hard work! :)
June 21st, 2012 at 09:53pm