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  • DeleteMe12

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    Very cute :)
    There were no gramatical mistakes that I could see.
    Great job!
    February 4th, 2011 at 11:38am
  • the fallen.

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    D'OH THIS WAS CUTE. tehe
    I loved the picture.
    December 14th, 2010 at 12:29am
  • idiotheque.

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    I’m not sure I fully understood the story, but from what I got, I really liked it. It was really sweet and fun and there were a couple little jabs at society as a whole, with the Nobodies and just the following bit in general. I thought it was a very nice way to comment on something pretty serious.

    There were two mistakes that I noticed, and they were the same mistake twice. The one I remember off the top of my head was you said “a ice cream” when it should “an” and there was another nearer the beginning of the story.

    Otherwise, it was perfect.
    December 12th, 2010 at 10:02pm