I'm going to start off by saying that I really like this idea. It's not the type of story I come across everyday, but that's a good thing. I really like how you've plotted out this entire foreign fantasy land within our world, and I can tell you put a lot of thought into creating the setting and world of this story. I also enjoyed reading yor attention to detail, especially in your descriptions of the dragons.
I do have a few suggestions though. I didn't really feel like the summary properly meshed with the story; the summary just seemed really informal and didn't really flow well with the way you've written this story. I just don't think it does the story justice. I would also suggest maybe describing the setting a little more, since you have taken the time to create this land and all this backstory, it would be nice to feel more immersed in the world by knowing the setting. I really like how much you've thought out your characters and the relationships amongst them, but I would suggest not to throw the entire backstory of the royal family and their dragons in in the very first chapter. It can just be a little overwhelming for the reader to try to soak up all this information in one chapter.
Overall, I feel like this is a really great idea and I can't wait to see where you take it. =D
I do have a few suggestions though. I didn't really feel like the summary properly meshed with the story; the summary just seemed really informal and didn't really flow well with the way you've written this story. I just don't think it does the story justice. I would also suggest maybe describing the setting a little more, since you have taken the time to create this land and all this backstory, it would be nice to feel more immersed in the world by knowing the setting. I really like how much you've thought out your characters and the relationships amongst them, but I would suggest not to throw the entire backstory of the royal family and their dragons in in the very first chapter. It can just be a little overwhelming for the reader to try to soak up all this information in one chapter.
Overall, I feel like this is a really great idea and I can't wait to see where you take it. =D