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  • xtwistedanddecayedx

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    OMG! That story was so amazing! I can't even begin to explain how much I love your writing!
    June 7th, 2012 at 12:01am
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    This was really cool... I like it a lot.

    Now I'm excited to read the sequel!
    April 11th, 2011 at 05:24am
  • kitsch

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    I really liked the ending. {: It's interesting how he wrote a letter
    as opposed to saying it in person. I think it's more realistic
    that way;I'd probably do the same if it were me in that situation.

    Feelings / emotions always have to complicate things. . .ah.

    Also, that is just downright cruel, because now I'm going to be waitingimpatiently
    for the sequel which is going to be even better than the prequel. Argh. D:

    I wonder how the formation of the band will change the dynamics of their
    friendship -cough- relationship. What happens backstage stays backstage. :3
    April 3rd, 2011 at 09:50am
  • Kyrstie Killjoy!

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    Awe that letter was soo sad. Now I'm off to read and subscribe to the sequeal :) Good job girl!
    April 3rd, 2011 at 04:29am
  • flyers

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    A Blink story!!!! Yeah! :D I love this story and got so sad when I realized there was no more to read after the last chapter :p. I cant wait for more! :)
    March 31st, 2011 at 04:36am
  • Kyrstie Killjoy!

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    Update!!!! Made me super happy to see an update and a sequeal!!!! Woo hoo!!
    March 31st, 2011 at 03:48am
  • Kyrstie Killjoy!

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    Mark!!!! I was in tears at the end! Tears woman! Tears!!!!!!!!! I feel so bad for him. His dad got what he deserved even if he is fictional! Well, Mark's biological dad is real obviously or there would be no mark....You know what I'm going to stop rambling....
    March 8th, 2011 at 02:33am
  • Naked_Zombie

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    This is one of those storie that make me squeel when I see it's updated.
    Uhm, it's just amazing yeah?
    February 20th, 2011 at 10:43pm
  • kitsch

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    I don't know if the chapter title added more to the overall feel
    of chapter eleven but I smiled by the end of it. Ahaha.
    This is making my headache subside a bit. (:

    Anyway, I lovelovelove the details you added to both chapters.
    It's sad how Tom broke the mirror and had that sort of silent convo with his mom.
    Because I'm wondering if she can just tell that he has a problem.
    I mean, really, I think she would have some inkling of what was going on. D,:

    I still want to hug Tom; Mark already had his share of 'em. <3
    February 20th, 2011 at 12:02pm
  • Technicolor.

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    KEEP THAT SON OF A MOTHER GOING, my love! <3
    February 18th, 2011 at 03:55am
  • Kyrstie Killjoy!

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    Deffinately protraying the characters very well. I think that if you put a wee bit more detail into their suppoundings that would help. I agree with what Kitsh said. You hear Mark talk a lot about his family, but you kind of leave us hanging about what really goes on. And you don't hear much From Tomn's family. Maybe adding in where this disorder stems from so we can understand Tom a bit better.

    The emotions are dead on. I get to the point where I feel tears well up in my eyes, especially th last chapter. I think the story can go down a bunch of different ways from where you've put it at this point.

    Keep up the good work <3
    January 26th, 2011 at 08:14pm
  • kitsch

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    I disagree with your personal opinion. c:
    I understand where you're coming from though, and here's me putting
    my two cents into it: you're worried about characterization, correct?
    I think you should add more details about their surroundings and
    who they interact with; possibly more of Mark's family issues and
    why Tom developed his disorder because of his surroundings.

    The back story of the characters is what I think you want to convey to the readers.
    I'm glad you're being honest about the future changes of this story though.
    Just don't over edit because then you'll become frustrated and get writer's block again.
    (Personal experience speaking for me on that part.)

    Anyway, you have their emotions in check but there could be more of
    a connection with other people such as their family and classmates.
    Perhaps you could add flashbacks of some sort? Those help, in my opinion.
    & I'd love it if you did a sequel as well.
    They're just so dysfunctional, it's terrible what they're going through in the story.
    That alone should give 'em another story to delve into. <3
    January 26th, 2011 at 08:48am
  • Kyrstie Killjoy!

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    Awe Tom is such a good friend! <3 Marc :(
    January 17th, 2011 at 06:32pm
  • Kyrstie Killjoy!

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    Ahhh questions!!!!! I want answers to their questions! Can't wait for the next update :)
    January 15th, 2011 at 12:13am
  • kitsch

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    Wooooosh.
    That is literally the sound effect I imagine when I think
    of Mark on a skateboard with the scenic back drop behind him.
    & his dad is a scary son of a bi. . .tmap.
    Crossing my fingers that Tom answers his questions
    and doesn't try to change the subject. ):
    January 13th, 2011 at 09:05am
  • Kyrstie Killjoy!

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    Totally agree with kitsch. I don't have to try very hard to imagin their interactions. Good work! But do you need to leave me on a cliff hanger like that!!! Haha, keep up the amazing work :)
    January 13th, 2011 at 12:34am
  • kitsch

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    How they interact with each other is so natural;
    I can really imagine them acting that way around each other.
    Whenever Tom talks about hating his body image though,
    I die a little inside, especially because he envies Mark. < / 3

    You've written this in such a way that makes me want to materialize in
    their world and just fix it, make it better, or at least do something helpful.
    & it's very well thought out how you correspond the chapter title to the content.
    Not many writers can pull that off completely.
    January 10th, 2011 at 07:51am
  • Kyrstie Killjoy!

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    :) I'm liking it.
    January 9th, 2011 at 03:09am
  • Kyrstie Killjoy!

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    Oh my goodness... I was looking for a Blink-182 story...Specifically Tom. Waaay excited <3
    January 7th, 2011 at 02:41am
  • kitsch

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    I am excited for this.
    The summary adds to that too.
    :D
    You are totally right about the lack of Blink lovin' on Mibba;
    I thought I was the only one who really noticed that.
    Anyway, I love how the first chapter is of Tom. <3
    I can't wait for the next chapter. (But I guess I kinda have to.)
    December 21st, 2010 at 11:25pm