Tainted Red. - Comments

Yay, an update! I had to read the last chapter again also to remember what was happening but I was able to get right back into it. You do a good job of building up excitement for what's to come. I'm looking forward to her meeting his parents.

Love it!
Your writing style makes me feel like I'm in the story watching everything happen, like a ghost in the room.
I never read the first "version" but this one rocks!

chapter four I found a mistake
"It produced no scent and was odorless."
You basically just repeated yourself only wording it differently.
Thought I would let you know in case you wanted to fix it, I enjoy this story very much and I see you are putting a lot of effort into it to make it the best it can be so I thought I'd let you know

OMG! YAY! :) I thought you deleted it when I couldn't find it in my subscriptions lol This just made my morning hahah I'm excited to read it!!! :D

I expected Laurice to be a boy for some reason....

I faintly remember there being a girl vampire who was after Taida's affections in the old version of this (or am I thinking of something else?) Is this the same one?
I rather like her...as a character. I assume I'd probably not like her very much if she were a real person....personality-wise, not cat-demon-wise. Haha.

Apparently Laurice is not in love with taida, but a Hellhound...haha.

What are you going to do when I post the last chapter of OTOOM? You've consistently updated right after I have. Haha.

--Sunny-Lee

I really liked this chapter! It was not awful at all, it was the opposite! Ahh I think I would go crazy if someone could read my mind, I would hate it. Can't wait for more!

*Jumps in joy* I was actually thinking about you updating this, I had a feeling. ^.^ The update was amazing and I understand if you don't update frequently cause it happens to me too. Wow, you're lucky you met all those people! I didn't get to see Batman unfortunately. :'( And I have to agree with you, it makes me sad too the Summer is basically over and school will be starting so soon. *Sighs* Take your time to update, just don't make us wait too long!

*Jumps in joy* I was actually thinking about you updating this, I had a feeling. ^.^ The update was amazing and I understand if you don't update frequently cause it happens to me too. Wow, you're lucky you met all those people! I didn't get to see Batman unfortunately. :'( And I have to agree with you, it makes me sad too the Summer is basically over and school will be starting so soon. *Sighs* Take your time to update, just don't make us wait to long!

Ouu, I like the book cover! :)

You always comment on OTOOM so fast, but I have to be in the mood to read things...haha.

Scarlet was hesitant to turn around. Fear prevented her from looking beyond—to see what Hell had in store for her.
--- But I want to see! LOOK AT IT SCARLET!

Peering over her shoulder, the scenery reeked of death.
---Oh...thanks
I actually really enjoyed the description.

Was this weird concoction made in Love For Never? (I will most definitely always ask you questions about similarities )

...I feel as if there's going to be an explanation to the little girl with a string in her head...I hope. Haha.

Wait....Taida can access Scarlet's thoughts but she can't access his? I feel like she should be able to...they both drank the same stuff and put both of their blood in. It should have connected them both the same way...or she hasn't realized she can access his thoughts too??

Sunny-Lee <3

I like Ashford and I think I remember that I liked him in the old one also haha. Eww when he was drinking the blood it made me feel weird lol but that's a good thing it means you did a good job haha.

I absolutely loved this story from before, but the changes you made now are perfect. Can't wait for the next chapter! (:

That time that I didn't read your chapters for awhile...anyways... this is my comment for CHAPTER TWO:

She rolled and hid under the bed like a helpless child.
--- Haha. She's locked in a room and expects her not to find her under the bed

In the original version, when he kidnapped her, did he actually like her? Or was he being forced to marry her? I have mixed memories about it...

I definitely like the ending of this chapter, as an author. It adds the shock factor. I feel like there would be windows in this room....but you didn't describe them :/ ...and by windows, I mean what colour it is OUTSIDE the windows...just because I'm curious what colour "Hell" would have for skies.

AND...CHAPTER THREE:

Denial never occurred to her, but it appeared to manifest itself whenever she thought the impossible was possible. Therefore, the impossible was definitely impossible. Her brain told her so. Plus, her kidnapper was probably a psychopath with an old man as his butler companion in a weird game of pretend. She kookily cracked a smile.
--I like this. This whole section...except the last sentence makes her sound a bit crazy too. lol.

Bathump
--I read that "Bat hump"...says something about me, I guess...

A hallucination—it was another hallucination.
---This implies that she's had hallucinations before...which is intriguing.

“Y-Yes,” she blurted. “I think you’re insane! For all I know, you’re a psychopath rapist, serial killer, pyromaniac arsonist, or some mass murderer with a weird fetish!”
---a psychopath rapist, serial killer, pyromaniac arsonist is a lot of things for a criminal to be...lol.

“Rest assured,” he gave a toothy grin, “although I can’t deny slaying another being or lighting something on fire, I know for a fact my partners were quite willing to be satisfied by me.”
---I like his personality...he's one of the popular kids in school. You can just tell.

Scarlet watched as what appeared to be two live objects squirming beneath his shirt, not quite in his spine, but close to the center of his back. Though his skin was covered, it seemed like his flesh was gurgling, just dying to detach itself from his body. It was an abhorrence to witness.
---Ew. I imagined first bugs coming out of his skin...then I realized that it was on his back, and was probably wings

I'm almost positive I asked you this last time, but how do you pronounce "Taida"?

A prince of the Underworld, playing with her hair, she wasn’t worthy... in her opinion.
---Since when did her opinion change? He kidnaps her, and then she isn't worthy of him playing with her hair? lol.

I can't remember what happened in the first version at ALL...did she end up going back home? Did she fall in love with him (I'm sure she did)?

It seems weird to me...I thought he had something to do...(since Ashford mentioned something in Chapter 2), but he stayed there and explained everything to her and now he's going to suck her blood....he's very....bipolar. Haha. I enjoyed this :D

Sunny-Lee <3

I'm also getting excited with each chapter! I can't wait to see what happens next!

I love the old one but so far this new and improved version is a millions times more amzing! Hurry up and update pretty please :'D

I really liked this chapter!! It was good and I am excited for more! I still think poor Ashley haha, I'm sad he did that to her friend.

Love it, as usual. Everything you write is good :)

I'm really looking forward to this story! I liked the first chapter! Even though it's different than it was before, that's a good thing because I'm sure you are re-writing so it can be different instead of exactly the same haha. Poor Ashley! It's funny, I actually know someone named Ashley Smith lol. I'm excited for the next chapter! :)

I have to be honest, I don't remember this story at all...like, small glimpses of after she was kidnapped. But I also have a feeling that this chapter is completely different...I don't know. I don't remember how she was kidnapped the first time. haha.

I really enjoyed the first part--particularly the first paragraph--when it's sort of like a prologue of Scarlet's life as a child. Just to be clear, the mom died because a car hit her, and Scarlet wasn't hit?

I'm glad you're resurrecting this :) On the super bright side, you already have the plot set out, so it's not like writer's block can stop you for too long :)

--Sunny-Lee

I never actually got a chance to read the 'old' one, but this is amazing Allie! You did an absolutely amazing job! <3 :DDD

I'm re-reading this. =]