First off I'm super sorry it's taken me so long to judge. Lovely layout I love the picture that you chose for it. The two lines that you picked for the summary were interesting, they made me really want to read the story. I like the way you started it out, it was interesting that's for sure. It gave me an idea as to what was going on. The way you wrote the conversation though, the ideas seemed muddled, you gave us what she was saying but not what she was doing. The picture I saw was Tammy standing in the bathroom talking on the phone. Chapter two was also written like that I found. The conversations were all like that. You showed us what they were saying but not what they were doing. You also used some of the wrong context. Where instead of we're. Little things like that. I loved thet ending though it was super cute, and I loved the plot in it. It was just adorable all together and despite my seemingly negative comment I really loved reading it and I thank you for your entry :)
Lovely layout I love the picture that you chose for it.
The two lines that you picked for the summary were interesting, they made me really want to read the story.
I like the way you started it out, it was interesting that's for sure. It gave me an idea as to what was going on. The way you wrote the conversation though, the ideas seemed muddled, you gave us what she was saying but not what she was doing. The picture I saw was Tammy standing in the bathroom talking on the phone.
Chapter two was also written like that I found. The conversations were all like that. You showed us what they were saying but not what they were doing. You also used some of the wrong context.
Where instead of we're.
Little things like that.
I loved thet ending though it was super cute, and I loved the plot in it. It was just adorable all together and despite my seemingly negative comment I really loved reading it and I thank you for your entry :)