Ah, the downfall. It's a classic outcome of any sin. This was quite good. Writing in the point of view of someone with a flaw is incredibly hard and I commend you on even trying. The one problem I noticed here is that you were too focused on putting forth different scenes and letting the plot develop to really describe things. The breathtaking imagery from the first round was lost. That does not mean it was a bad piece, it was good and you have made it to the final round (only three people put forth a final product for this round, so it was kind of automatic). I'll be posting it soon, and I'll let you know. :D
December 30th, 2010 at 05:15pm