This was interesting. It reminded me of the Bourne Identity at first haha. I just watched that movie a couple nights ago, don't ask…
Anyway, this was an interesting story. It feels like there should be more chapters to it or something. The whole amnesia thing is pretty interesting, but I feel like you should have elaborated on it a little more. You never gave a reason for why his brother was the only person who visited him, for instance. Or how Oli coped with loosing his memory. I just feel like there were a lot of issues that were never addressed, and this could have been a lot better of a story if they were.
That being said, I thought what issues were addressed done so fairly well; Oli's initial reaction seemed pretty realistic as well as the scenario for how he lost his memory. You just need to work on character interactions. Overall this was a good idea, I enjoyed reading it. (:
Anyway, this was an interesting story. It feels like there should be more chapters to it or something. The whole amnesia thing is pretty interesting, but I feel like you should have elaborated on it a little more. You never gave a reason for why his brother was the only person who visited him, for instance. Or how Oli coped with loosing his memory. I just feel like there were a lot of issues that were never addressed, and this could have been a lot better of a story if they were.
That being said, I thought what issues were addressed done so fairly well; Oli's initial reaction seemed pretty realistic as well as the scenario for how he lost his memory. You just need to work on character interactions. Overall this was a good idea, I enjoyed reading it. (: