August 16th, 2015 at 06:13pm
Comment swap here!
The first sentence definitely draws the reader in. I really love the names chosen, and definitely can't wait to learn more about the world Artemis is moving into. I'll be honest, the idea of a human having to choose between supernatural creatures is a little cliche, but you write well enough that it doesn't feel like a cliche. Just be careful that this doesn't turn into a complete Mary Sue adventure. That being said, Artemis seems interesting and I really like this so far!
Great beginning, I love the way the story captures the readers attention it just shows that your story is really well written I think your characters are interesting and I do hope you keep writing I'll look forward to reading more your layout looks neat and everything falls in place well so that's a good thing anyways great job and keep it up.