Elevator Doors - Comments

I love how you're giving details about each character. I'm excited to read more about the story but so far I enjoy the idea. It's something different. =)

This is just amazing! I really love the characters you've created so far. They have their likable things about them, and their unlikeable things -- something I really appreciated. I also noticed that you have a great way of writing where you provide details, but not details that don't really matter or details that seem too cliche and pretty. In short, I loved this story. I'm definitely going to subscribe. (:

title; (since you specifically asked)

i have 0 problem with the title. from the two short chapters, though, it is hard to see if it's going to relate really well. it ties in very well with the summary which actually painted an almost completely different picture for me after i read the story. but i have no complaints, like i said. it's a little too soon to tell, sorry.

layout;
i really like this layout because the background image reminds me of wallpaper that you would see in a very pricey hotel on the walls next to the elevator. i love that it's pink without being overly girly. it's just very... well put together.

first chapter;

it reminds me of the devil wears prada because i watched it yesterday so it made me giggle.

i love the descriptions. i'm not a huge description person for writing. and i don't like reading too much. so this is a very nice balance and blend. it gives me the details, but different details instead of repeatedly expanding on the same one for five friggin' paragraphs.

Madison liked to believe it was an acknowledgment of power; an act of submission.
i love this line. it's not sexual, but it makes me think sex. which makes me think of this woman who you wouldn't normally expect to be domineering at first glance but it turns out she knows exactly what she's doing.

i love how she's a bitch. you don't apologize for her at all when she's being a total fucking bitch. she might not be later but she is now. and i like it. i mean, i don't like her, but i like that you're not apologize and saying she's calling the woman illegal because her father was brutally murdered by some mexican guy and now she hates everyone who's not white. i appreciate it a lot.

second chapter;

i like how it picks up right where chapter one left off, but from a different perspective. there's no space and time for introducing a new character, it just happens naturally.

Each and every time, a wave of bleach scented cleaner burned the lining of her nose and turned her eyes red.
that actually made my eyes water. because who hasn't felt that before? i just wanted you to know it actually got a physical response from me.

oooh, she's pregnant. i love how it's just tossed in at the last paragraph so we'll get to see more of it later.

overall;
i love stories with individual characters that have their own voices. i'm always worried about what's going to happen when the characters start interacting more after the 'introduction' chapters. like, will they still go one by one or will there be a new narration voice . . . but i think the narration is the same in both chapters, just with a different perspective, so either way it isn't going to be jarring to the reader.

This is a cool idea - I really like the layout. So, good job on that I must say..............
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I really like this story, I thought your summary itself was really amazing. I never really thought of elevators that way and I think the whole concept behind this story is really unique and interesting.

The layout is really beautiful and makes the story more appealing. I love how you slowly introduce the details so that when we first read about Madison she appears as a diligent work woman and then later in the chapter do we realise how she has quite a high status in her work and is pretty arrogant and stuck up. Also in chapter two, Ines is such a sweet character you really made her personality and feelings clear how she feels out of place the country is in, and then only let it drop in the end that she is pregnant. You have a really effective way of writing and this story made for an enjoyable read.

Wow, Madison's ... a stereotypical woman who works in a nice office and is CEO or something like that. I like the idea of the elevator, I've never really thought about a sort of intimacy about them, but I guess I have now. I like it.

This seems like it'll be really interesting. :) Madison seems to have a rather harsh personality, but she's being blatantly honest like people are in their heads so I think that's really cool. I can't wait for more! :D

I'm really looking forward to this story! It's a really cool concept. This character is an interesting one, and I bet that you have many interesting characters and plot twists to come.