The Ferals - Comments

OH! You must be the most fetching creature to create something like this. I'm fascinated by every character. And even after finishing the chapters, I still feel like I'm living with Nathaniel hunched behind me in shadow. What a relief I didn't read this at night.

This belongs on everyone's bookshelf with its pages inside a warn-with-love hard cover. <3

This sounds very intriguing. I'm subscribing to this story.

Ohh, this is so interesting! I'm addicted :)

Wow, I am so hooked with this! It is so well written and the story is very interesting. I can't wait for more :)

First off, I must say that this was definitely an intriguing read. I'm assuming that the summary was a bit of foreshadowing, or at least, that's how I interpreted it, and I thought that was a really tactful way of immediately immersing the reader into the action of the story.

Though I'm aware that a lot of readers on this site adore being thrust into the action right in the first chapter, personally, I prefer a little more backstory, which was the only thing I really felt was lacking in this first chapter. I felt like it sort of devalued the purpose of having a more action-focused summary just to continue on with that action and not include a hint of backstory.

I think the thing the struck me most in this opening chapter was your vivid descriptions of Nathaniel. I could just feel the feral aspects in every single one of his movements and features, and that just drew me more into what his possible story could be. A part of me wishes that you would've extended your way with imageery onto the narrator and Mr. Allen, though I understand that Nathaniel is meant to be the focus of the chapter.

I also really enjoyed how you chose to close the chapter. It just gave me that looming sense that this was only the beginning of a downward spiral.

Overall, though I'm not a fan of this style (I prefer more simplistic language), I thought this was beautifully written and that your concept was definitely original. I wish you the best of luck as you continue to work on this.

The summary made me confused when I started to read the story itself since I haven't been able to connect the two yet. I am loving the story itself though. This seems to be pretty well thought out and written. The girl makes me annoyed at the end of the first chapter, but I feel like I shouldn't judge her since I don't know everything which makes me want to read more.

In the first chapter I have one critique. The first thing I process is the smell, the scent of human flesh and sweat and waist. The last word should be waste shouldn't it? That's how I read it at least.

And now that I have read chapter two, I am even MORE curious as to what is going to happen. I love that this is historical and it makes me wonder if it is going to be fantasy or realistic. Either way I have a feeling I am going to love it. Definitely subbing.

This is fascinating! I love the summary and how it griped my attention and the actual story. From the very beginning to the end, the details were so vivid and flowed effortlessly together. Plus, the mystery of the boy, Nathaniel, brings an eerie feeling to the story that I really like and the time period, from what I can tell, is lovely.

I'm really impressed with this story and I can't wait for updates!

Wow, this is beautiful. It reminds me of a fairy tale almost. It's like magic. It grabbed my attention immediatley and I cannnot wait to read more. I want to know what is going to happen next. The descriptions are incredible. I really love it and I think you're a very talented writer.

I'm not particularly sure what this is going to be about, but my attention has been grabbed. Quite forcefully so, at that. This creation seems very mysterious and seems as if it will have a dire impact on those who read it. It seems like it'll be an emotional piece. Anyway, the way you've described Nathaniel and such are just beautiful. The whole piece is beautiful. You've done a fantastic job with this and I do expect more very soon. <3