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I felt the plot moved a little too fast for me, it confused me a little. I've never heard of any of the bands in this story, so I was kind of reading it without really knowing much- but I was able to read more than a chapter because it interests me a little. The layout fits he story but fcuked with my eyes a little but I think your chapters could be a little longer (i only read the first 3) I found a few spelling problems nothing that can't be fixed. Keep going with it though and good luck

hi,
I got to this through comment swap, and its not the kind of story i would normally read or know anything about, so i apologise if this isnt extremely helpful...
getting to the point, anyway- my major thought on this are that the complexities of the plot an characters are interesting enough to ake me read more than the required two chapters, which is a great sign given that i dont like black metal enough to read about it usually.
The only advice i have, though, is to work on plot coherency and timing. it all seems to move really fast, and sometimes the detail you do have isnt enough to fill out the story at this pace. For example, it seems odd when the mayhem (i think that was the name, sorry if its not xD ) band members walk off; here the scene would be more fufilling if this occured just before or after the girls arrive, for interests sake.
Hope this is useful! =)

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I liked that the layout was easy to read and matches the story. To be honest I've never heard of any of the bands you've mentioned so when I started reading I was a bit confused however the description and dialogue was enough to convince me to keep reading and I love what I've read so far :)

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Heard of Mayhem, but I've never been a fan of them. However, after reading this, I'll probably go check them out. I love what you have going here so far. I've always been a fan of stories that have the main original character be in a band. You portray the band life pretty well, and this is coming from someone who has experience in that area. Kudos to you on that. Otherwise, keep up the great work. You're gonna have something awesome when you finish. Best of luck. xx

This comment swap is really working out for me! I love all the stories its giving me and this plot was so well written. I'm not a huge Mayhem fan but I'll look into just cause of this story. It was so different but with the great grammer and simplicity of the layout really made me happy just because that it so hard to find now a days. Great job and keep writing :)

I LOVE THIS! Comment Swap gave me this story, and it's amazing! I love it. I love the story line and the plot. I can really get into the story also. This is really really really great! I love Mayhem and you really brought out everything really well!

Completely different, insane, and fantastic fan fiction I love it!

Heeey :)

First of all, this story involves a band I never thought I'd read a fanfic for :P Fucking MAYHEM :) I used to be into black metal a lot, but then it turned into shit :P Still, though, Mayhem is awesome, so I knew from the second I saw your story I'd enjoy it. :)

It's really well-written, the plot is really interesting and the characters are really well-developed ( I love Euronymous anyways ;D )

All in all, GREAT work ;)

The comment swap brought me here, first I just gotta say this story is good. I mean it's different from all I had read before. I read mostly band fanfiction and well this is among my league, but I read a7x, mostly A7X. Adtr, Ptv, and well yeah, so I’m kinda of a mainstream reader as well as writer xD Ha ha ha >.<
But I’m glad le comment swap had brought me here. First the whole plot line was like wow, amazing. Is very well written, the description of places and people is very good and so is the grammar. *claps* it’s very hard to find stories that had all those elements. So, my highly respects to you. I liked the layout, the use of the grey font with the black background and the red borders, really nice. :NotBad:
The whole story looks very promising to me, it has very good potential. I like your writing style, btw and the way the different point of views appears. Generally, point of views turn pointless in a story, but this was good.
I’m sorry this comments has so many like bla bla stuff, but you know in comments swap you gotta make it loooong xD Anyways, yeah update this soon. :3

Le comment swap has teleported me to this marvelous tale!

I immediately noticed that pace you keep in your writing which I absolutely LOVE. I loathe stories that move so quickly in the story line where nothing ever makes sense. and your description is incredible. I encourage you to keep it up and continue to grow in your writing! Well done!

This isn't the kind of story I'd usually read, but Comment Swap sent me here and I'm glad it did!

Your writing has a fantastic pace to it, and I raced through the chapters. You've written the characters really well too, I found myself caring about what happened to them after the first chapter! You're brilliant at writing description.

This story is by turns funny and moving, and I've thoroughly enjoyed reading it!

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This story is different and interesting. I like your characters and how you describe them. The pace is exciting and it really draws you in and takes you on a wild ride. It's dark and creative and it's made me almost cry a few times. So moving and colorful, really you did a amazing job and I hope you continue to write in the future.

Hiya,I'm from Comment Swap:)
The title immediatealy drew me in and I was saying "Oooo what's this".Haha,I'm wierd.I like the red and black layout since they are my favorite colors so that was some points with me adn I didn't even begin reading.When I read the little summary I was thinking "Hmm let's see where this goes".After reading everything I absolutely loved it:)

This story is AMAZING. I love it! It speaks to me. I guess I dress kinda like how you describe these girls to dress. And their stories are so sad! It makes me want to cry. But overall, this story is absolutely amazing. I loooooove itt!(:

I found this through comment swap, and I have to say your story probably isn't the exact kind of story i would normally look for. But with all that aside, I've read the first two chapters so far and it's very well written and quite interesting. :)

Woow I love this!

This is a great story!

*cries*

The Kamelot song at the end was perfect. The mean is changed, but still it fits so well.

Good chapter.

Last few chapters... had me nearly crying. I just so happened to be listening to Freezing Moon too.

Great chapters.

fantastic chapter. :)