Supermodels Don't Wear Underwear - Comments

I love how innocent Ryan is throughout all of this.
And how broken he becomes towards the end.
My heart bleeds for him.

Also, his and Brendon's relationship is beautiful in a weird way.
They obviously both care a great deal about one another even if their's a huge difference between them.

A few typos, but very good and sweet :) hals gross, but then again I would do the same thing haha ;)

Story/Review Game:

The layout is gorgeous as well as the banner. It’s not often I read stories about male model, so I’m excited about this Ryan Ross I’m going to be reading about.

“Ryan went because his mom thought public school would be too dangers and he refused to wear a uniform.” – There’s a small typo, dangerous is what I’m guessing you meant. But so far, I liked how you opened this story up and how specific you were about Ryan’s lifestyle. While I’m reading, I’m thinking, “yeah, I’m just like him, but wait…I don’t have money like that.” Ryan’s seems down to earth and likeable (so far) we as readers have to catch ourselves because we’re nothing like him, but we want to be (if that makes any sense). I also like the fact that you’re naming name brand stuff to emphasize how much money he has and what his lifestyle represents as a whole. And that money doesn’t buy happiness.

Side Note: So far, I’ve ran across two small typos, and I’m honestly not one for picking and pointing those out, in other words looking for them. I believe a review should consists more than that, but if you like, I would be more than happy to point them out for you, just so you’ll know and can fix them, Dru.

Brendon and Ryan’s relationship is adorable and it makes sense to me. Those two really give an understanding of opposites attract. Being friends with Brendon shows how much Ryan wants that normal teenage life and maybe sometimes fantasizes about trading places with Brendon and vice versa with Ryan. Before Brendon said it, I completely thought he was only being friends with Ryan because he’ll give him the “hook up” on new shit and take him to all the fashions parties, but it’s different and through your writing, I can tell their friendship is raw and genuine (so far at least) and Brendon wants to fuck Ryan sooooo badly.

“Despite minimum sexual experience, Ryan had plenty of experience with people trying to change that.” – I love how you worded that sentence. It’s powerful and means a lot more then Ryan just saying “no”

“It's worse than when they said you went straight for Megan Fox. At least Megan Fox is hot.” – That made me giggle a little bit because if Megan Fox can make gay guys straight, she can definitely make straight girls go gay. Even though Ryan is still gay I thought it was super cute

Toward the end were Ryan was coming home to go to Alex’s party with Brendon, something about Ryan had changed. When Brendon would bring up Hal’s name of any sort, I knew something was wrong, I kind of wish there were more details going on, like a small back story between them because there were times where I would feel something deeply – and other times where I wouldn’t. The ending was my favorite part. Despite Ryan’s crazy lifestyle, I truly think he just wants to be normal, and Brendon gives him that security and it makes my heart smile. You write teenage boys so well, and even though Ryan was gay, he still came off as a boy to me and not a female. Brendon picking up Ryan made me realize that’s where Ryan should have been along. Good job, Dru.

AU.
~3100 words.

This is another one of the stories I wrote in jail. It's not that great, but I may do another set in the same universe, because I really like the premise.

xoxox
-Dru