Separation - Comments

I admit, I don't like Jessie (she comes off as a pushy...bitch), but I still love this pairing because James puts up with a lot of abuse from her, but this pairing is still adorable. You wrote both of them really well, Airi! :D I love it. <3

Aww that's so cute <3 I love those two

D'aww, that was really adorable! I've only seen Pokemon a few times, and I never thought that I'd read (let alone like) fanfiction about it. And I just did on both counts! So nice job! :]

I am terribly sorry that I had not written a review on this story sooner. I have been terribly busy lately and I have not gotten around to writing one.

But here is my review finally:
To begin with, the James/Jessie pairing was perfect. For anyone who has ever read/watched anything related to Pokemon they would already be aware of a closeness between the two.

You didn't give much background knowledge on these two characters and did not give detail as to why James suddenly thought up the question: What would happen if they became separated? It could of been taken as just a worry that someone has when they have a crush on someone else, but if you wanted to you could go back and expand on where the question had came from.

You did show the contrast between the character's different feelings; Jessie is one way and James is another and how that effected the plot. Jessie was more preoccupied with what was going on at the time but seemed to be the leader between the two; yet James seemed to be more thoughtful for the future when he seemed to be the more spontaneous one. The contrast worked nicely for the story. I did notice that the plot was more informal while the wording was more formal. Since Jessie and James were close, you would of expected them to be more informal to one another, but if I can remember (since it's been a long while since I watched Pokemon) they were more formal? I can't remember.
Overall, this short story was nice and very easy to read as well as to relate with.

I've never read a pokemon fan-fic and i've got to admit, I really liked this one
Team rocket<3 they always make me laugh its odd them being serious in this, but i like it
:O, aww no!, i dont want them seperated what is jessie without james? and what is james without jessie?
I really liked this

A Pokemon fan-fiction? You are amazing. (:

I love the Jessie/James pairing. They're so cute together. And this was really cute.
I liked it. :3 ^.^

Firstly: I love, love, love Pokemon so much, you don't know how happy I was to see something Pokemon related here. :) (I'm also surprised to see anime fanfics in your stories, it's hard finding them here on mibba :))

Now, onto your story. I must say, I like this story - it's sweet and you captured their personalities and thoughts well - like, their feelings make sense (if that makes sense? ahhh sorry, I hardly make sense after reading a good story.. ><) sort of like, I could see this happening in the manga/anime if there was an episode that focused more on their relationship...

And Jessie's thought on being a villain and Ash's pikachu made me smile. Haha, what was it again? "They couldn’t even capture a stupid electric rat from a bunch of pathetic kids. Yeaauup. That's Jessie, alright.

And the ending? I liked it too - how Jessie found her resolution and realised just how important James was to her - that was really cute. ^^ My only wish was meowth could have been more involved - but then again, it wouldn't be the same and it was nice how you focused only on the two. :)

Okay, I'm going to stop before I go on and on about Pokemon, and all that jazz. :)

I'm really bad at writing comments, so I apologize in advance.

This was so fluffy, just like you said in the author's note. It was just so sweet, I had a smile on my face while reading it. I've loved Pokemon so much, and Jessie and James are by far two of my favourite characters (and pairing), and you did them so much justice!

I liked how there was no distractions, if that makes any sense. It revolved around the theme of separation, and the focus didn't change at all.

I'm always up for anime fanfiction, and I've read some more of your stuff before. You're really talented at making fanfiction enjoyable even though someone is not that familiar with the fandom, I'm really envious. It's a goal of mine. So thank you for giving me hope in my goal.

a pokemon fan fiction, I've never seen one of those
But, I used to be a huge pokemon person, so this should be good :)
I've always thought that Jessie and James should get together
first off, the banner is really good, I like the picture
aww :) he's only on team rocket because he wants ot be with jessie
well protect her, but still! that means he wants to be with her
xD " a stupid rat from pathetic kids" loved that line
well, guys are always dnese, you really can't help that haha
they both like each other :) that's so damn cute
I wish some romance would come out between them in the show
this was absolutely adoarble. I loved it so damn much!
I like the way you describe them and how you got their personaliteies out
it was just so cute :)

Though i don't know much about Pokemon, i feel that you did a great job identifying the characters and their personalities. It was a really sweet story. I like how it revolved around the one word, seperation. Even though there weren't alot of things going on, i think the simple setting really helped with focussing on the characters and their thoughts. I really liked how you showed us both of their thoughts and feelings. As i said, it was very sweet. Great job! =)

Awww!!!!
It's so real, even though it's pokemon, and this really surprised me... in a good way.
I really enjoyed reading this.
Really good job.
and thanks, btw, for commenting on mine! =)

Wow. I've never read a Pokemon fanfiction, and never thought I ever would, but this was really good. :D You portrayed the two's doubts and thoughts really well; I could feel their unease like it were my own. Plus, I liked the way you displayed their personalities. James seemed kind of twitchy, and Jesse seemed tough but with a much more soft interior. Like I said, I know nothing about Pokemon, but I enjoyed this and it was easy to follow for a novice like me. :] Well done!

The only thing I can think to say on the side of criticism is that there were some places where commas were lacking. Otherwise, though, there were no spelling errors and the wording was great. Awesome job, bro.