Smoke - Comments

This was beautifully written! I was blown away with your descriptions and details, they were fabulous. I loved both of the scenes. You showed Teddy's apparent carelessness to Russell's feelings in the break up scene, and Russell's complete heartbreak both after the breakup and when he sees his ex with a woman. All in all, I loved it. It played very nicely into the quote you chose. Nicely done. Good luck!

P.S. -Just a note, I noticed your image no longer works. I assumed it was just a divider, but thought you'd like to know either way. :)

Ouch. Honestly, that's always my fear if I somehow ended up dating a bisexual man that he would leave me for another man. That's almost worse than being left for another woman. Actually, that's completely worse. I love the writing in this. It's very fluid and heartbreakingly real. Russell's emotions were right there on the page and you could feel his pain through every word. It's a beautiful piece you have written here. :]