He Calls Me Sweetheart - Comments

this is really cute, i love it!! Keep it up!! =D

OH MY FLUFFY RAINBOW BUNNIES!!!!!!! you MUST keep this!!!! and if u dont update soon my rainbow bunnies WILL come there and steal all ur left shoes and eat all the food in ur house!!! so i suggest you update before they get to unruly. do it!! DO IT NOW!!!! thx!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This is absolutely wonderful.
I don't think I've ever read a slash this well developed and believable.
I really do like this. Fantastic job, my dear.

first off, like this title, and the banner <3
Ohh, he lives with the guy he really likes
this should be a good one!
I love how you described the snow as crispy, that's a unique one!
aww, his parents went on trips without him? poor guy
i mean that's gotta be sad when you're a kid
aww it's good that the woman could help him :)
really like this idea, and you've done a great job so far :D

I like your layout and banner first of all.

When reading this, I did enjoy the conversations, it really helped bringing the characters to a believable state.

I really enjoy your descriptions also, some stories I've read have either some or no good descriptions and others have really good ones.

I can't wait to see more from you dear.
Keep it up. <3

Your discription of things is really good. It's detailed without rambling. Some of my favorite authors have the horrible habit of either not describing things at all, or spending wayyyy too much time to do it. I liked how you described the winter/snow and Oliver.

I also liked the conversations, you make the characters talk/act like real people would, making everything believable :D

Overall very well written and it's probably one of the best I've read in a while :D

Subscribingggg ;D

Crispy, white, unique flakes of snow fluttered about gracefully in the gentle wind. The icy air nipped at my exploited skin.
^ I love those lines.

You have a way with words but it's still light and simple. You have a perfect amount of deatail in your writing. I also love how you wrote the way his teacher talks. XD

Peek-a-boo?
I think that's how you spelt it... XD that's a different way to describe it XD. I wanna say that now!

This is really good.

I agree with Ava Marie's first comment about the wedding phrase. It made me think of the same thing and whether this was intentional or not, it's still a really good link to have made.

There was one little pet peeve of mine, which was that you kept saying "British accent". The only little thing I have with that is that there are so many different British accents, and it would have been lovely if you picked out a certain one(s). This page has a fantastic comprehensive list of the most common accents in the UK with examples, so it might help out a little :) Just open the folders to see the full lists.

However, I adore the way you describe things. Your choices of adjectives are brilliant, and sometimes very original. I loved the phrase in the second chapter when you mentioned that "he had a bit of a peek-a-boo hair style going on." It's a really interesting thought, but one that I can still visualise really easily.

I also love how natural you sound as you write speech. You don't make it sound posh or pretentious, but write it just as a normal person would say it, and I love it. It makes it so much easier to hear in my head and also makes your characters seem alot more real and easier to empathise with, which I love.

It's really, really good. Well done!

It's simply cute.

keepkeepkeepkeepkeepkeep

Sounds interesting so far. I'll be waiting for more. :3

All three of the items were blue and borrowed.

I liked this line because it made my mind do this little flashback thing to that old wedding rhyme; like something new, something old something borrowed, something blue. (:

I think the only thing that disappointed me in even the slightest was the lack of detail in the beginning. It seems like it'll be a great story because what little detail you do have just entices me and makes me adore this so far. I have so many budding questions and I cannot wait until they're answered. Where was he at before? Why did this woman rescue him? Is he going to be okay? Where exactly is he?

I may just subscribe in hopes that you continue this. ;)
Amazing job.(: <3

I haven't read a well-developed slash story in what seems like forever but I'm pretty sure I just found one. This is a good start and the characters are slowly, but surely developing. I'm anxious to see what happens with Mrs. Jones' son and everything that happens as the plot thickens. I will definitely be coming back to see where you take this. Good job, sweetheart. <3