Liar - Comments

Aw, Jennie, this is so cute! I love how you based it off of Blood, and even though the whole donating blood bit made me shudder, it was cute as pie. I love Mikey and Annette's relationship. It's so darling. I can't wait to see the next bit! :D

Anette was directly across the circle from him. Her eyes were shut and her face was extremely pale save the pink lipstick that graced her lips. His eyes trailed down to her wrists, where he could tell her cuts had faded to a few small scars. Mikey was thankful for this; she had been suck a wreck only two months ago.
This bit was really cute, I'm not even sure why. I just find it sweet that he'd be focusing on her whilst he's getting his blood taken, like she's a constant or something familiar or just a friendly (or not so friendly ;D) face. Awwww. I like the way you subtly mentioned the passing of time, too, and didn't just do like a TWO MONTHS LATER thing at the start.

This bit though:
“I goth help after New Years.”
XD While it's kind of awesome as is... yeah, I don't think that's what you meant to write.

So yeah, I really really liked this. It's interesting, and I like the little development of Mikey and Anette and their relationship, especially at the end. The only thing I'll say is it seemed a little... clinical, at times. Like it was sort of too focused on the mechanical aspects of it and you didn't really get to see how it was affecting them. And I get why it's like that, because duh, it's in a hospital which is clinical and everything and it fits, I just think it's missing some of your characteristic Icamane!charm. I do like it, though, I think it's really really good and it's an interesting premise that I'd really like to see more of. Promoting blood donation for the nation! :D