Seeking Samuel - Comments

:O oh my god! Did he get raped! Twice! Well you know that's kinda what i thought but I thought it was gonna be his brother. Guess i was wrong. Anyways I like the detachtedness of the way he sees his life, like he's seeing it through someone elses eyes. it really conveys how he's feeling. I can't wait to read more and see where this is going to go.
.RawR.

Lisa, Lisa, Lisa. If only you know how much I truly admire and love your work as a writer. I'm constantly checking my subscriptions list to see if either of your two stories have been updated while I was at school, though I'm normally the first on you tell when things are updated. I'm honored, really.

Now, I know you were worried that this chapter would be too long, but don't let such nonsense creep into your mind. It was amazing and beautifully written and length in a story, especially on mibba, is nothing short of superb. Keep it up (: Take your time and enjoy your writing instead of viewing it as an obligation. Don't let fangirls that don't know about your personal life get to you because they're not worth it.

I love how Sam is continuously distracted while talking to his doctor, just like he had been over that weekend on that night. Your descriptive skills were amazing in this chapter and your talent most definitely shined through. They really made the beginning of this chapter seem powerful.

"...twirling his gold embossed, onyx writing pen in his fingers, something he usually did when he wanted me to talk. I bet that had cost a fortune. But then again, if you were a doctor, it would probably be pretty affordable. What might that pen feel like, resting in his fingers? Heavy, or light? Smooth, maybe. I wondered if it ever gave him a sense of power, knowing he could buy something that nice, or if the power ever flowed out onto his yellow legal pad, coating those countless notes he scrawled during our meetings."

Yes, I had to quote all of that because the comparison was amazing and mind-blowing. I wish I had your talent, Lisa, I truly do. There are many instances such as this that I should quote in this comment, but I don't want to bore you by making you re-read your writing AGAIN.

I also love how you characterize Diana. She sounds like an amazing friend, though she's a bit unusual in ways. And I like how you're slowly informing us of Paul even though we do now know who he is. There's more stuff we need to figure out. I hate how he's taking advantage of Sam though. It's statuary rape and Sam doesn't seem that willing. He said he was the prey to Paul's shark-like predator. It needs to stop and Paul needs to go far away or go in jail or Bryson needs to be a good brother and come to the rescue the second he finds out or something.

With that being said, I loved this chapter. The length isn't a bother in the least bit and I can't wait to see what is going to happen next. It's truly taking off. Keep up the amazing work, Lisa <3. You know I'm always here as a means of motivation.

In a really distant way, Sam kind of reminds me of Charlie.
In a good way of course, I don't think you were imitating Perks of Being A Wallflower or anything. Promise(:
But I just love how he seemed so..distant, even thought it's his thoughts we're reading as we're going.
Maybe he needs his psychiatrist more than he's letting on?
Haha, I like Diana so far too. She seems fun with her music hair (:
That was a really good description of that, by the way. I loved the way you wrote this entire thing.
And, Paul.
I know I shouldn't like him.
But I'm almost intrigued by his presence, even though Sam obviously doesn't like what he's doing.
It's kind of one of those moments when you hear a lot of bad things about a person, and then when you meet them for real, you don't want to judge them off of what you've heard so you're just kind of..curious until you can decide for yourself?
Yeah, that's how I feel about Paul right now.

I really really hope you're feeling better, and thank you for the massive update<3
more soon as always.

This is actually amazing. I love how the descriptoins are subtle and not contrived at all. You can really keep the story going while letting the readers in on little tidbits of information along the way which help us to get to know Sam better and the way he thinks.
I particularly enjoyed the aspect of mystery in the first chapter where we aren't told every little detail about how Sam loses his virginity. The absence of a name for the boy who takes it adds to the sense that Sam is trying his hardest not to remember, but his conscious attempts to forget are just ingraining it further in his memory.
The characterisation of Dr. Henry really was beautifully done while Sam's perceptions are muddled with digressions throughout which show a mildly erratic thought process with nostalgic undertones which don't quite take the edge off the anxiety he might have about sex.
So, yeah, you are a really talented writer and I am looking forwards to seeing where this is going.

keep writing long chapters! this story is amazing! update soon :)

A+, you're an extraordinary writer, but I'm sure you already know that. (:

Hot damn, I absolutely love this so far! Your writing is always so down to earth, realistic, and so different than so many other authors on Mibba.
I really like Sam's thought process so far; how easily distracted he is even when in the midst of ~losin' it~ and how he isn't so sure of himself by the ending. I cannot wait for your next update!

Lisaaaa! This is so good!
The first chapter was, at least.
I'm sure the rest will be just as good(:
I've honestly never read a story about this kind of thing.
And I'm extremely interested to see where you go with it <3

Ah Lisa <3 Were currently talking on AIM so you know how much I love this already, but I figured it deserves a comment.
I can't wait to see where you take this. <3

really good story. I liked how you didn't go to far into the detail when it came to the sex, sometimes people can get to gross with it. I can't really see where you're going with this but its good, the fact that you made him seem so uncertain when it came down to it made the story different in a good way. Most of the times writers try and make their characters seem like they are invinsible, loving there first time no matter what. So anyways, can't wait to read more. Anxiously waiting for updates.
.Rawr.

this is really good so far
i likve sam
update soon!