You're Not the Only One? - Comments

Yeah, I stand with what I said before. Azula is the definition of the true manipulative evil.

Anyway, what's up with Zuko? In the first chapter, he seemed like he hated Jewel. But, in this chapter, it seemed like he's really close with her. Did something happen that make him change? Is that because he too was banished so he became bitter and acted the way he did?

Azula is the definition of the true manipulative evil. I know someone like her in my highschool class. I shuddered every time I think about that girl.

“Uh-not be as good as yours because you’re the fire princess and you rule,” I laughed nervously. Gosh I can’t believe an underclassman is making me feel nervous. She’s 11 for crying out loud I’m 14!

This part made me smile because I can see myself reacting that way when facing someone intimidating. ^_^

Anyway, this is a good chapter. It's simple yet informative.

Sorry, I got mixed up with the name. What I meant in the previous comment is that Sokka is funny.

I thought they'd left Jewel at the ship while they were escaping because you didn't explain about anyone picking her up because she was supposed to be passed out, right? I think, the only thing I have problem with this chapter is too little explanation and descriptions. Other than that, I think it's all good.

“Hey wait a minute,” everyone turned to Sokka. “This mean you’re from the fire Nation!” he pointed at me.

Trust Sokka to realize that fact this late. This makes me LOL!

Damn the cliffhanger! I've been wanting to know why she was banished since the first chapter!

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Oh, did they just leave Jewel behind while they escape?

It's still confusing to me. I think you need a little more descriptions on things.

“You left me,” I whispered at Zuko my body lying limp. “You left,” I felt the warmth of my tears before blackness clouded my mind. Zuko looked up furious and terrified as Aang swirled a water tornado around him and released it sending everyone but Jewel over board.

I almost missed the change of POV from Jewel's to third person POV so I got a bit confused. But that maybe because I'm easily confused.

Zuko is funny. ^_^ Every dialogue he said in this chapter made me smile and giggle.

I like Iroh. I think he's like Dumbledore. ^_^

At first, I wasn't sure what the girl's name is and I got frustrated. I thought Jewel was just a pet name. Then, I realize, it's really was her name. ^_^ Silly me. I think that Haku and Karun have some feelings for Jewel?

One question, though. Why does Zuko dislike Jewel so much? Or, will it be mentioned later as the story unfold? I would like to know why Jewel would not be allowed to come home.

This was so good. It really blew my.mind to see an Avatar fanfiction that was written so well. The discription was brilliant and the diolouge really captured the characters personallities. You did a super amazing job with this. Keep up the good work and i can't wait to read more of your stories. :).

This is a wonderful story but the lack of commas disrupt the story flow a bit. xD But other than that, woot! I loved it. Everyone's in character. Would you like me to Beta your story?

Loveeeeeeeeeee it so far!

^ =] Just for that I'll update again this week <3

Avatar Fan Fic!
I love it!
I just read chapter 7 and I love the Links idea. Keep writing

Avatar Fan Fic!
I love it!
I just read chapter 7 and I love the Links idea. Keep writing

Hmm I'm thinking I might re-write =/ meh idk maybe not but there might be some NC-17 chapters that I'll label for precaution sake just a heads up.

Okay, so first off I absolutely adore Avatar: TLA, so having you choose this story to swap with was like fate calling me. I kid you not.

Oh Iroh and his tea You've captured his voice very well. I heard him in my head when I was reading his bits of dialogue.

"...the deep red scorch across his left eye screamed against his pale skin."
I love that bit of description. It perfectly encompasses the scar itself and the way Zuko is so self-conscious when it comes to the backstory of how it got there. Like, he'll never be able to get rid of it physically because it's so out there, but he can try and pretend that it doesn't exist.

This is really good so far. It's also clever the way you incorporated actual lines of dialogue from the TV show (is it pathetic that I can tell?) and added your own in between. Super job :D

Wow, this is interesting!! i'd like to see what you'd do with it.

I really loved reading this... it was interesting! :)
Update! :D

First thoughts: I do believe the title is incorrectly capitalized.
The layout is pretty adorable, though. :) All Avatar-esque and very, very readable. It's also very, very inviting and I love that.<3 ( :

Only the Avatar master of all four elements could stop them but when the world needed him most he vanished.

There should be commas after Avatar and then after elements. Another would probably fit snuggly right after 'them', too. (:

I'd also like to say that I really like the idea of 'links,' as you put it. (: It's very original, hehe. I think the only thing I don't like of it is the word 'sacrifice' D: I don't want to see dead awesome peoples, aha. It'd break my heart - and that's for real legit. </3

First things first, I love your detail. It's like, the best thing I've seen in a long time, hehe. (: You already know you have grammar mistakes, so I'll keep it short and sweet by saying that you might would benefit from a beta, perhaps. There were a bunch of spots where a comma would've been appropriate.

I really think you captured the Uncle's air well. He's all knowing and calm and such. (: I love it.

Really and truly, I don't think there are enough words for me to tell you how much I liked reading this. It was a very nice escape from the usual and I'm happy I got a chance to read this.

I also like how you ended the chapter giving her luck. It makes me think there's this hugggeeeee journey she'll be going on soon, like the adventure is just starting.

Like I said, I enjoyed reading this. Truly<3 (:

Wow.....Just by reading the intro im kinda hypnotized. Nice Though can i ask if you could put the lil pairings at the beginning bc i will get confused xD this is my fav show series i hope theres some romance haha