Wallpaper - Comments

This is simply beautiful. The way the narration comes to a full circle at the end, how she misses the wallpaper and insists on the spelling of her name is wonderful. The subtle humour in a way makes it more heartbreaking, because I have this image of Leslie cracking a joke in an attempt to stop herself from crying. I espessially love how Leslie says she misses the horrid wallpaper.

I think this is something that a lot of people can relate to, as death of a loved one is one of those sad, heartbreaking moments that a lot of people will experience at some point. And the way you've portrayed the grandmother's death is enough to make me tear up a little.

The layout is gorgeous as well, and fits with the stoy incredibly well.

Wasn't what I was expecting at all. This was honest, naked, and pure. About what we take for granted, how we wish we still had what we lost, how we wish we knew what we had while it was still ours. Those precious moments that fly by us without us knowing, because we don't care enough to want to know.

The fact that this didn't stem from a personal experience, doesn't distract from how beautiful it was. It made me think of my own grandmother, and how much I take her for granted.

This was amazing in the sense of how relateable it was, how much you tied in your reader by writing about something everyone experiences, and managed to keep it clear away from cliches.

The technical aspect of this was perfect, as well. I'm impressed.

This was really good too. I loved the banner and the background, it worked together really well. I liked that it seemed innocent and naive but the subject matter was actually really intense and something that makes people grow up sooner than they should.

This had all the right feelings and they were ones that a lot of people can relate to. I know that I've lost people in my life and there were things about them when they were Live that nearly drove me crazy, but when you lose them, everything comes back, even the bad, and you start missing that too.

Amazing job! You're a great writer!

This is just beautiful.

It's so nostalgic, so reminiscent. It's almost to the point of heartbreaking - looking to what's been in the knowledge that it will never, ever come back. I was utterly convinced by the power of your words, and when I got to the end, and you said that it wasn't from personal experience, that came as a massive shock. It was so raw and open and real that I couldn't not believe every single word.

I think one of the most effective things that you do is add that little touch of humour, which makes the whole thing oh so bittersweet. Just the little lines that make you smile momentarily, like "They were entertaining, even though you couldn’t tell me where Vietnam was if your life depended on it." And then you read onwards and suddenly all the just goes again.

It's beautiful. Just beautiful.

I loved it. I really did. I thought it was a perfect way to tell that even though you might dislike some things about your grandparents, they're still your family and you'll always love them. I remember disliking how my grandparents house always smelled like smoke and how my grandad would always sit in his room and do his puzzles, being boring. Yet I miss them and their stupid smoke filled out like crazy.

So this is definitely relateable. I also love your way with words. And the whole "it's spelled..." at the end was a comedic touch. The layout suits well, and this was just great. XD

Whoa. This was very well made.

First, I would love to state that the layout is beautiful.Even though I can't handle bright colors.
I loved the banner. It was beautiful and cute. c:

Then, there's the story. Heh. I loved on how the Grandma would call Leslie "Elizabeth." The Grandma sounds like a real grandma. Isn't there a brain disease that makes old people forget a bajillion things? Ahlzimers, I think? [I have no idea how to spell it...]

All in all, I really liked it. It was realistic.

P.S. I lost my mom's mom to a stroke, and my dad's mom to old age. R.I.P., Grandmas.

I adored the banner. I thought it was elegantly beautiful and matched the rest of the layout.

I loved the first sentence. It had me hooked in immediately. This was a beautiful little piece. I love how it goes from all the things she disliked when Grandma was alive to missing all those things she hated now that she's gone. It's so wonderfully heartbreaking.

Even though it was short, I thought you painted a clear picture with the description without over describing it. It was just the right amount of imagery that I got a distinct picture in my mind without even being given too much to go off of.

I found the grandmother to be realistic, even though it's sad that she's delusional and has lost her memory for the most part. I love that though. It just adds so much more to the story and makes the ending that much more powerful.

Overall it was absolutely gorgeous and I'm so glad you told me about it.

Layout was perfect. Banner was perfect. Just great.

This was so touching and it really made me so sad. When I started it, it really seemed like it was something you had written about a personal experience. If it wasn't, then you have serious talent and you really made this so believable. So tell people it wasn't from real experience. ;)

I loved the way the grandmother never knew her name. That was so sweet and sad and made me feel so bad for that old woman, and her granddaughter. It was also sort of funny and just one of those things that really happen, that she called her by a different name. I smiled.

The ending was so sad. I had a feeling the whole time that this was being written after the grandmother died, and I was right. Just so sad. You captured the feelings beautifully here. It was so well written. No complaints from me at all.

Honestly, this made me tear up a little :'( But quite frankly, that's a good thing. It's nice to be left with some sort of emotion after becoming invested in a piece.

Is it bad that the first line I read reminded me of my own wallpaper in my bedroom? I seriously have Grandma wallpaper XD Anyways, I thought that was a nice tactic used to begin this piece, because we do tend to remember the little everyday details when it comes to people.

As I read on, I got that tugging feeling that this wasn't going to end well, and I think you did a good job of slowly easing the reader into that fact instead of just being like BAM! Grandma's dead!

I thought the ending was ridiculously touching, and I lvoe how all of the things that had annoyed Leslie in the past concerning her grandmother were the ones that she longed for in the end when she was gone.

This line was my favorite:

I miss you calling me Elizabeth, but just for the record, it’s spelled “L-E-S-L-I-E.”

I just thought it tied the whole piece together and made everything come full circle. I also liked catchy a glimpse of the main character's spunk, even in such a tragic time.

This was an amazing piece <3

Unf.

Who are you to ever comment such lovely things on my work. I barely ever get the chance to read your work and its one of the biggest crimes against humanity - ever. Seriously, lovely. This was all so bittersweet and familiar in ways you don't want anything to be familiar. You have this beautiful description and fabulous flow and you conquer emotion like a pro.

You might not want to come to Scotland any more, Aaden. I'm going to lock you in my bedroom and force you to write if you ever do. (;
This is me solemnly swearing to read your work a lot more often because it's beautiful and deserves far more attention than I ever give it.

Thank you for being an amazing writer and restoring my hope in Mibbz, Aaden.
<3

Wow, I loved every little bit of that, seriously. It was such a cute idea and made for a nice story. I swear I almost cried and it definitely makes me want to visit my grandma right now. Even though it was sad, I liked how there was humor incorporated too and all the little details on how crazy old women can be (:

I only noticed one thing, “I though it was ugly and dated and deserved to be burned.” – It should be thought

I’ll have to read more of your writing, such a great story!

That's beautiful. And I'm just gonna say it. I cried. I lost my grandmother recently and this describes pretty much exactly how I feel. Beautifully written.

This made me want to cry, because I can relate about my grandmother. She drives me insane and is pretty odd, but when she passes I know that I'll be really upset.

The layout was beautiful and I loved it a lot. This whole thing was great and you did an amazing job!

It didn't make me cry. But it made me want to. I agree with asking alex because we do sometimes think about them being sort of annoying, but then we realize that we love them and that we would be devestate if they were gone.

I loved this. Though it didn't really make me cry, a twinge of sadness overcame me. We all face this as our grandparents get older, more annoying at times. But then when we're gone we wish for all those annoying moments and want them back. You did a lovely job with this. I don't know what else to say, other than that this was very bittersweet to read, yet wonderful. Great job. <3

I like how you started out with how she hated the wall paper, and how her grandma would always tell her about your grandpa and Vietnam. I found the ending sad. I could feel the hurt pouring from this. I could feel the pain.

It was heartbreaking to read. :/

Awuh, I absolutely loved this. You showed so much emotion in the one-shot and made it so...realistic. Like a book, and I felt like I was reading right off the page.
Amazing work :3

:( This was beautifully written and I wouldn't have had this written any other way. you have an amazing talent for making a tear-jerker. I totally understand how she feels, its an emotions everyone feels at some point or another and you conveyed it very well.

This was wonderful. I like how you began this with how much she hated the wallpaper, but later on in the piece, you refered back to how she misses the wallpaper. I like the comparasion between what her grandmother did and how much she misses it. This was so heartbreaking -- I couldn't even fathom how it feels to loose a grandmother or someone you love. Beautiful.

Seriously, I can't get over how amazing your work is.
This was so real for me and so easy for me to relate too.
Tears were pricking at my eyes, it was breathtaking.

You've done it again, love. Fantastic job. <3