Okay so you update so well that I want to marry you or do something much naughtier. And the chapter was full of my baby, which I love. And I'm going to be the stronger woman and allow Annabelle to have Noah, even though it breaks my heart. Because Jacob is such a douche and even though she loves him she needs to end up with Noah. I'll stop dictating your story now. Righteo. Onto the real comment. For your first chapter that hasn't been re-written, it's absolutely perfect and fits in with the tone of the rest of the story. It all has a dark, eerie aura surrounded it, which is just gaaah. I love how you stick to your character's traits very well and how you're slowly letting as learn more about Noah and what the real him is like. That dream/nightmare chapter messed with my mind. It was awesome. Keep being awesome. That is all.
February 18th, 2012 at 10:09am