March 14th, 2011 at 02:21am
I'll begin with the layout, and let me just tell you how much I really love it. It's simple, yet it it goes with the story somehow. It just has that feel to it, with the dark, earthy tones. It's well done, and I love the banner as well. I was assuming the entire time that the girl was Amelia. She's really pretty, and I loved the outfit you put together on polyvore for her on the first chapter.
Lately I've gotten into the Harry Potter series, so when I began reading this and realized that this was sorta a spin off of the stories, with the spells and the Hogwarts students being "snatched", I really took a liking to it. It was like, a second first impression to me, and it was well made. Your writing is very descriptive also. From what I read, I can tell that Amelia is very hard headed, stubborn and somewhat arrogant, but I like that. It isn't typical, most characters (including mine) are always the outgoing, nicey-nicey type, the good kids, whereas Amelia is clearly a rebel.
Loooooved this. I really like your style of writing, and the idea of this story is intriguing.
Onto the story. It's very well written, I didn't notice any huge errors, or really any at all. It all flows together well.
I like the idea you have going on with this. I've read quite a few HP fics on here, but none quite like this. I like how you're using original characters and still throwing in a few familiar ones. JK Rowling didn't talk about the life of snatchers, but I think you're doing a great job at writing it.
Just wondering, are you planning on incorporating something to do with Harry in this? I think it would be cool if you didn't. Just kept them running in different circles.
You're doing a great job so far. I think I'll subscribe to this, to see what you do with the rest of the story. I only read this for a swap, but I'm glad that I did. :)