Fight for You - Comments

Ah, I didn't actually know it was a fanfiction till I read the comments but anyhows...
I think I'm just in love with gerard. I loved how he said 'I am hope.'

I thought that was like the key-line of the story.
I loved the emotion you portrayed in it. Awesome story:)

So I'm not a big fanfiction one but I felt the need to comment this mainly because eI wanted to let you know that you need to fix your title...>.> It should be Fight For You.

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Anyway. While the story line is fantastic, it's sweet how much Gerard cares for this girl--I feel like you need to cut down the dialogue and add more emotion and description. Because I'm getting so much dialogue and what not and just...yeah, not enough detail. but I can definitely tell that you have talent my lady. You just have to find a way to put it to fantastic use.

This is the first MCR story I've ever read and I really liked it. I didn't go through the previous ones, but I might when I've got more tim because this was just great. There was one part, right at the beginning, where you said he can tell she's crying or something like that, and you just need to watch your tenses because everything before and after that was written in the past, while that one sentence is in the present. Also, I loved the line at the very end where you said she would love him with her little, broken heart and I just adored that line. Just the way you put little in there, even though (from what I gather) she is grown woman really hit home and you just understood how alone she felt and how desperately she needed someone to help her. It was a really good oneshot and I liked that the whole thing really only spanned over a half hour at most, I love stories that do that.

Wow....
Okay I went back and read all the stories in this collection and I honestly love each and every one of them. The only thing that kinda bothered me was that you set up the character of Gerard really well, but then you had him and Frankie refer to the girl as Gee's "pet." I don't think that fit at all with the way you had Gee's character feeling about this girl. Hope that makes sense. This collection is really beautiful and emotional. Thank you for writing it.
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