Remember Them In All Their Crippled Glory - Comments

I loved how whole and connected this whole story was. It was almost "round," if you get what I mean. Everything made sense together- the original drawing on the window, to the metaphor, to the speaker drawing on the window, and back to the character drawing on the window. It was like one moment in time, one picture, cut out and annotated. And it was done beautifully.

At first I didn't like how often you used the word "you," but now I appreciate it. Just like I said before, if this were one moment in time, it makes sense that it is all about this person drawing on the window (the "you"). It made the reader remember what exactly the story was about.

It was really sad, and also very true. You wrote it in a way that pertains to any person and any hidden or masked beauty- not just a physical defect. I truly loved this- great job :]

I feel that I shouldn't love this, but I do anyways.

It's so great when people represent how little things can make the world go round, and how we're all different through our little quirks along the road. The window was a great symbol and really well explained.

I feel like we got so much out of the character that the line about the knife isn't necessary because the reader can already see how broken she is through the narration. Also, the italics die off and it would make sense to have one, then no more, instead of one, a little bit of writing, and then two, and then nothing for a really long time. That's just me though.

Bittersweet lovely<3

layout is gorgeous! it blends together beautifully
the title is really good too <3 ;)
I like how you are going from happy moments to sad ones
it shows the depth of the relationship you are explaining
this person is gone D: why? What happened?
aww this was sad! but still so good <3

I'm not joking when I say I've got tears in my eyes. I know how that feels, because I've been depressed for so long and have always been able to see bright and shiny things in everything except myself. Of course I'm doing better now, but THAT'S NOT WHAT THIS COMMENT IS ABOUT!

And I draw stars on icy windows and stare at the beads of water dripping down them, but I can never find what you saw.
- I love it. Seriously, this one sentence sort of just jumped out at me. The concept is pretty damn amazing, and it did touch me merely because I can so relate. If there were any mistakes I didn't see them - and I'm brilliant at finding mistakes. XD

I love the banner too.

:D

Can I tell you something? I listened to "Lump Sum" by Bon Iver when I read this, and it really just made the story for me, you know? Check that out?

This was good. The layout was gorgeous and really went well with the story. I can hardly describe the over all feeling over your words; they just sunk into my brain and really god me thinking.

Excellent job.

First Glance
I love the simplicity of the layout. It goes wel with the mood of the drabble, I find. (:

After reading
This was veryh well written overall. It was enjoyable to read how you compared "you" to a window and the beads of water falling after drawing on them.
The glimpse of something so beautiful, something so incredible...but it's covered up with fog, and so you can only see a small part of it. I really liked this line; it was a great visual and really added to the story from it's comparing.
I believe this really shows what a person with a friend or loved one who's depressed sees, having had a friend the same way. And, it kind of shows the depressed one's own thoughts. It was very relatable.
Beautifully done (:

You have no idea how much I loved this.
It was so heartbreaking and raw, but really beautiful at the same time.
I think anyone who has had depression, or known someone with depression can relate to it, even though that may not be what you're going for.
Amazing job.

Wow. I love how the serious tone fades into a soft thought of love. Great work.