Losing Lori - Comments

it's not my type, but you're a good writer. i'd really like to read more stories written by you.

Holy fuck. This. Is. Amazing. Its so heart squeezing, stomach turning, tear jerkingly amazing. I loved it. Despite all of her flaws, he still loves her. Simply amazing.

That. Was. So. Fucking. Heartbreakingly. Gut-wrenchingly. Depressing.
But in a good way, too, don't worry. I still loved it to bits even though it made me all sad inside. :)

You know, I knew that he wasn't going to have this Disney-esque happy ending but I mean, I still sort of hoped, aha. What can I say? I sort of fell in love with him and it's only natural I wanted him to have some good times. I mean right through to the end I still wanted to crush him into a hug because he just really needs a hug.

I think one of my favorite things about this how he points out all of her flaws and how much of a bitch she was and just these really weird things about her that didn't make sense, like a million reasons why he shoudn't give a crap about her at all. I wasn't like he saw her as some innocent little princess, he saw her for who she truly was, faults and all. And he admitted that it was a super dick move to ditch him. He sees all of this and he still loves her, and I think thats why it's so strong and passionate. It's not some perfect little crush. It's actually causing him pain and he still won't let it go because he loves her. And while it's fucking sad as shit, and makes me want to punch Lori in the face because I know that people are supposed to follow their dreams and not be a people pleaser or whatever but I AM ALLOWED TO HATE HER.

She made Oliver all sad! D:

The ending was perfect though, the whole karma thing. I like how he changed though, he turned into a real genuine dude and it's like Lori was this giant risk but she was a lesson too, and I feel like that's all she was supposed to be. Not his wife, but a lesson. Bitch turned him down anyways, aha.

THE END WAS JUST SAD. wah.

LOL SO AS YOU CAN TELL, I loved this, and I'm sad to see it go. Well, sad to see Oli go. Lori can go fuck a tree.

:D

NO, NO, NO NO, NO, NO, NO, NO, NO, NO, NO, NO, NO, NO! IT CAN'T BE OVER. NO!

I'm going to go cry now, thanks. I almost wished that Oliver would've moved on. But that wouldn't have gone too well over with the story itself. As heart-breaking and tear-jerking as it was, I still loved it with all of my shattered little heart. Amazing ending, Brookie. Just amazing.

I loved the last chapter! You're such a great writer, and you did a wonderful job ending the story. It was heart-breaking, but I loved it. All of it. Amazing job! <3

This story was heart-wrenching, Brooke. Like, seriously. It breaks my heart, what Oliver's going through. Though, in my opinion, he sounds a little stalkeresque and creepy, he must've really been in love with her. Lol I feel like this was a letter to Lori, or something of the sort. While reading it, I couldn't picture Oliver; I could picture a girl, Lori, reading a letter to herself, though. And for me, that kind of made it better (:

I couldn't have imagined a better ending to this! Really, Brookie, you've outdone yourself! This story has got to be one of my all-time favourites! Congrats on the amazing writing talent that you have!

x,
Holli

You're such an amazing writer.
This story was unlike anything i've ever read before.
You really do have so much talent.

Right from the beginning, I had a feeling that this was going to be one of my favorite chapters. Throughout the story, we've really only been seeing all of Lori's faults and her problems, but you immediately launched into Oliver's problems, like cheating; it definitely shows that he certainly wasn't an angel by any definition.

I realized that even though I could get hurt in the process, it was okay to fall in love. This line. This was so heartbreaking because it is just so real. Now before I forget this idea; when Oliver started talking about the strangers he slept with, I couldn't help but think about whether or not there was a stranger out there who felt the same way about him that he does about Lori. I'm not sure if that would be possible after one night but you never know.

I wish you would have said yes when I asked you to be my wife. That line honestly made me start to cry. I have felt so deeply for Oliver this entire story but that line made me realize just how much I felt for him... and to be honest, it kind of made me realize just how much I can be like Lori.

I know I've told you this multiple times throughout the story but seriously, this is one of the best stories I have ever read on this site. It was so real and so emotional and so completely heartbreaking. And I kind of like that it didn't happily because really, how many breakups do end happily? I just hope that Oli finds something eventually that is even better than Lori; it's obvious that as much as he wants her back, she doesn't deserve him. Thank you so much, lovely, for writing this completely beautiful story; I am going to miss it, so much. <3

I started reading this when chapter seventeen was up and only this last chapter was left.
And I was gunna comment afterwards, but then I didn't. Sorry...
The reason I didn't was I would have felt awkward just randomly popping up on the second to last chapter and commenting.....
That might not be awkward to some, but it was to me.
And also the other reason I didn't was because I don't know what to say.
You've blown me with this. It's terrific, and even that not the best word to describe this with.
I think this is absolutely amazingly written and everything.
And I love how it was all from Oli's point and how he's almost talking to her and everything. I don't know, it just tugs at my heart for some reason.
AND IT DOESN'T FEEL RIGHT D:
I don't normally like tug-at-heart-strings stories.
But I like this. Gah, I keep rambling.
Sorry, but yeah, this is amazing. You're an awesome writer.
Never forget that.

Oooooh I adore this, way too much! I ABSOLUTELY cannot wait until the last chapter! I'm excited for it to all tie together finally(: This is a very interesting story. Great imagination you have there, Brookie :D Toodles!

It took me forever to get around to reading this, I don't know why. I'm very glad I'm reading it now. It's amazing! I love all of the emotion you put into each chapter, it breaks my heart. I can't wait until the last update <3

Bah, I don't know why I've never read this. I mean it's you. AND OLIVER SYKES. I guess I'm just a lazy bastard. Anyway, I just read the prologue, but I shall be returning later to read ALL OF THE CHAPTERS and leave you a pretty commented on it.

And if I hold the sheets really tight and lick my lips, I can still taste you.

I don't know why, but I imagined him licking the sheets instead of his lips. o.o

That mention in the author's note made me smile. I honestly cannot believe that this story is down to one chapter remaining. I honestly feel like you could continue this for so long and I wouldn't get sick of it. You've taken such a simple concept (the breaking of a relationship) and turned it into something truly beautiful. And this chapter was no exception. I really, really love how you talked about Oliver crying because there's just something about a boy crying that really makes things seem that much more serious. We know that Lori's hurt him but now we really know, if that makes sense. The Karma thing was wonderful; I can definitely relate to that. I have no idea how this is going to end; I think Oliver is coming to terms with himself and realizing that not everything was Lori's fault. Although I'm sad that this is coming to an end, I nonetheless cannot wait to see how you wrap this up. <3

I almost cried when I saw you mentioned me in your author's note :') I feel so loved.

I loved this chapter. This is the first time he's mentioned that he's cried over her leaving. We've all seen rage, sadness, and down-right suicidal, but this was the first time that we've actually heard about him crying. I like that.

I'm not ready for it to be over D: I'm gonna cry! D':

I know that I've said this ten or so times since I started reading this story but this was my favorite chapter. I think that you really showed us an entire other part of Lori's personality here; so much is revealed through how someone dresses but I've never seen someone really focus on that in a story. (After all, there's a difference between describing how something dresses and really delving into it, if that makes any sense at all). Anyways; I loved this chapter and I'm quite sad that this is coming to an end. :(

Maybe she never dressed like a whore because she didn't just want a one-night stand kind of thing. Maybe it's like what she did to Oliver. She'll reel them in with her false innocence, capture their heart, and then leave them to sew their hearts back together. She wanted someone who she could make them fall in love with her. Sadly, I can be like that at times. I make a guy like me and then leave.... I'm a sick person. Anyways, I'm glad this chapter was made. I always imagined her as a whore, but I guess I was wrong. Please post soon.

I love this story, i'll be sad to see it end.

Lori is a bitch. A dumb ass fucking whore mother fucking bitch ass bitch. I hate this bitch. But I love Oliver. With a passion. And I love this story. With a passion. :D

But, I feel like Oli's kinda' a real big creeper. Like, as psycho. Soooo that's my prediction. I think he kills her and stuff. Because that's the vibe I get. Haha
Idk if that's what you were going for or not, but I'm kinda' morbid, and that's how it makes me feel!

UPDATE QUICK ASSHOLE!

x,
Holli (:

Lori is a bitch. A dumb ass fucking whore mother fucking bitch ass bitch. I hate this bitch. But I love Oliver. With a passion. And I love this story. With a passion. :D

But, I feel like Oli's kinda' a real big creeper. Like, as psycho. Soooo that's my prediction. I think he kills her and stuff. Because that's the vibe I get. Haha
Idk if that's what you were going for or not, but I'm kinda' morbid, and that's how it makes me feel!

UPDATE QUICK ASSHOLE!

x,
Holli (:

I love all of the emotion you pack into each chapter, regardless of each one being short. I could really feel how Oli felt for Lori and all of the pain he's going through watching her walk away, missing her, and even though there's so little dialogue, there's so much characterization. I've never come across a female character like Lori before, and even though I sort of resent her for leaving Oli like that, she's very interesting.
I've just started and finished reading up until this most recent chapter today. This is beautifully real and wonderfully written, and I know I'll be sad when it ends.