I really enjoyed the shift in tone for this chapter; even though I can definitely relate to how Oli feels about Lori at his worst, it's also great to see that there were occasions where things weren't hell. I also thought that it was neat that you chose to show this intimacy through kissing instead of sex; it was just so interesting, since you never see a character really looking at such a simple act. I seriously think that your Oli is one of the best characters I've read on this entire site, for sheer ability to relate to and just how genuinely real he seems. You've succeeded tremendously in capturing the extremely complicated emotions following the disintegration of a relationship and that's why I love this story so.
July 15th, 2011 at 04:37am