Perfection. - Comments

I honestly don't know what else to say that hasn't already. This was beautiful and innocent like and your descriptions and words reflected everything grand mother nature has to offer. You put light on the good things about nature and how its supposed to make people feel. I thought this was lovely and it even made me smile. I think this is the best piece I've read from you by far. Great job, dear.

this was one of the sweetest things i've read in a really long time. it fit the title perfectly, it didn't just look perfect, it actually felt perfect as i read it. it had such a powerful aura around the words, it was magnificent. there were a couple parts, near the beginning, where there were a few problems with apostrophes, but other than that it was fine. you had wonderful imagery and i loved that you painted all these pictures in my head even before you really told me that the story isn't really about the flowers and the Sun, but its about a boy and how much a girl loves him. it was just really sweet and very well-written. great job!

Aw, Vee :3 This is beautiful! I have no idea why you're unsure about it, because it's wonderful. You're such a talented writer and you shouldn't doubt yourself. :)

And when it rains, mother earths perfume I think it should be mother earth's? I'm not entirely sure, though.

This was gorgeous, just like you! Your imagery and your way with words are just... unbelievably beautiful. Well done, lovely!

Firstly, I would just like to say that this is one of the most inspiring peices that I've ever read. You know of all the problems I have had of late, with family, work, myself and love, etc. After I read this, I felt uplifted, and I had butterflies. That's a hard thing to give me when I've been in such a state. But you've made me see the beauty in life again,just through your writing.

Firstly, I noticed at the bottom of the story, in the author's notes... you said 'not sure about this peice'.
All I can ask, is why?

I've never read anything as beautiful as this before, it had me in awe straight from the first paragraph. The imagery is pure, pure as in innocent. It's also incredibly vivid and powerful.

'mother earths perfume sticks to the translucent droplets as a sign of hope'
I loved that line, I adored it. I thought it was such a beautiful way to describe rain and it really hit me. Honestly, I don't understand what you think is wrong with this peice at all.

'And whenever I stare out at each unique flower, its petals carefully crafted with precise detail into a perfect circle and the convivial centre my mind always wanders to other natural beauties that change within a split second.'
I have no words, other than stunning.

'To someone each thing is a sign of perfection, something that can upturn the corners of their lips or make them take a second to appreciate the little things in life'
And this line, this line made me smile myself. It's as if you're nudging your readers to look upon what they find beautful and what they appreciate most in life, and to love that. To accept it.

You've left me in total awe. Thank you. It was a pleasure to read.

I love your imagery in this piece. When I started reading it I was absorbed into your description of the flowers, the sun, and the rain, but you made the story flow so effortlessly into a metaphor for love. Fantastic.

My favorite line: "He's those seven colours smeared against the clouds when sun and rain collide."

Maybe this is just me, but I don't really like the word "gets" in this sentence:
"The flowers aroma gets split up within pure oxygen, skimming along more and more petals."
Maybe you could use "becomes" or something? I don't know. XD I love the sentence, but "gets' jumps out at me.

Great job!

Dammit Vee, why are you so damn talented?
This was beautiful and stunning and just unbelievably perfect. <3

I am so, so speechless.

This is such a wonderful piece. Your words are so intricate and precise that they bring concrete images in my head. I love how it pretty much says that there's always hope, and it warmed my heart so much. I was able to feel all her love and interest and wonder for the world around her, and her love for "him", too.

Lovely, lovely. :)