On the Corner of Tranquil and Snow - Comments

"You've Already Written It!" Prewrite Contest:

Layout: The layout was mysterious but good. I liked the girl's face...it portrayed everything in your story.

Content: I liked the mysteriousness of the story, and the whole "demon" thing.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: This was amazingly written...I found no mistakes.

Overall: This was a well-written Drabble.

I'm torn in thinking this drabble as horror and romance. But I'll have to go with both.

I really like the first sentence, and it could very easily be my favorite in the whole drabble. This isn't confusing, in fact, it just gives me enough space to think up the background and the meaning. You really nailed this feeling of despair and utter loneliness in such short amount of words, truly brilliant. However, as much as I'm not a fan of the girl's picture [too blurred for me], I have to admit that it gave the entire drabble an eerie feeling.

Overall, I really like this and I love how you were able to portray so many emotions [even love] with so little words.
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The layout was, obviously, the first thing I noticed. The darkened face of the girl, who I'm assuming is the one mentioned in the story, really adds to 'The shadow' character, but that could just be me.

"Maybe she shouldn’t have allowed the demons to mingle with the shadows."
This line really grabbed me - I want to know more. Did she create the shadow? Is it her fault the shadow and demons are suffocating her?

The rest of the story makes me wonder if the shadow and the demons are a metaphor for what she's done in the past, and who is the voice that's speaking to her?

Basically, I adore how you've written this, so simple, so short, with no unnecessary detail.

The layout was delightfully creepy, in the best way possible. The opening line was amazing as well; I'm a sucker for those first words that completely ensnare you and you certainly did that. This whole story was like that; I was completely enraptured. I have no idea what really happened but I like that you left it so open to interpretation. The same thing goes for the title; I was thinking it meant a street corner at first but now I'm not sure what it could be. Overall, this was an extremely good drabble; I saw nothing wrong with it. (:

I really liked this.
It's written really well and I adore the sense of mystery about it, it makes you want to find out who she is, what she's done and who these demons and shadows are. I also like how you've described everything, because you haven't really, you've just told the story. That probably made no sense. I adore your word choices and how it's so simple yet so effective. The last line is really powerful as well, it's a great way to end this.