Review! Woot! So, this was interesting. It seemed like Russell was just at that party trying to forget about Teddy, but in the end after he was with that boy, he was reminded of him all over again. This story wasn't super emotional, but it was foggy, hazy; like there's this lost feeling about it. At least, that's what I got from it. So. I liked it. It's curious and a little bit depressing since it's like Russell is dead inside. I also think this is one of the pieces where you're not sure you like it until you think about it for a while and re-read it... So, yeah. It's like obscure, deeply passionate, yet nonsensical music that no one seems to get until something clicks. Anyways. I didn't notice any errors in grammar usage or spelling so you're good there. The only problem is the readability of the piece. Like I said before, the first time I read I was indifferent about it, but the more I thought and after I read it over a couple more times it made a harder impact. This is a good yet bad thing since most people don't really think too much about a story unless they really like it the first time they read it. So, anywho. Good job! :D
So, this was interesting. It seemed like Russell was just at that party trying to forget about Teddy, but in the end after he was with that boy, he was reminded of him all over again. This story wasn't super emotional, but it was foggy, hazy; like there's this lost feeling about it. At least, that's what I got from it. So. I liked it. It's curious and a little bit depressing since it's like Russell is dead inside. I also think this is one of the pieces where you're not sure you like it until you think about it for a while and re-read it... So, yeah. It's like obscure, deeply passionate, yet nonsensical music that no one seems to get until something clicks. Anyways. I didn't notice any errors in grammar usage or spelling so you're good there. The only problem is the readability of the piece. Like I said before, the first time I read I was indifferent about it, but the more I thought and after I read it over a couple more times it made a harder impact. This is a good yet bad thing since most people don't really think too much about a story unless they really like it the first time they read it. So, anywho. Good job! :D