May 2nd, 2011 at 02:58am
Aw, I like this. I felt so sorry for the little girl in the beginning. Camille Rose. That’s a pretty, pretty name. :) But yes, I know one kid who had TB and died because of it, so I totally felt the summary.
Anyway, I love the story. I love the hope Camille’s character has. She’s a strong girl, and I love her. I love all the detail you’ve supplied, and everything that’s going on is clear and distinct. I really love this, and I’ll definitely read more.
The picture is really cute, too, by the way.
Anyways, it's a pretty damn good chapter, I like the way you described how the town celebrated the beginning of fall. I also get the feeling that Jason likes or maybe has a crush on Camille?
I love how you describe Camille's character though, she sounds like a strong person, and I like that. I like how she's not letting this disease control her life and she's living it the way she wants to.
Great work :3