Here Without You - Comments

Wow first of all, props on giving me chills with the first chapter. Your descriptions are fantastic and I felt like I was there because everything was described so clearly. I especially loved the way that you described Alice because not only does it let the reader know what she looks like, but it also gives the reader a look into how Ethan thinks of her. In reality, she may not have been as beautiful as described, but that's how Ethan sees her and loves her. Giving the reader a look into how Ethan sees Alice helps the reader to understand his personality more and why he can’t seem to let go of his feelings for her even though she's gone.

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Well, for starters, I want to thank you for being original with your layout. It wasn't flashy or distracting, so high five, Charlie Brown. ;D
Secondly, I want to thank you for being so descriptive. I've always really liked third person, but for some stories, it isn't quite right. No worries, it fit your entry perfectly and had it been written differently, I'm not sure it would have flowed the right way.
I really liked the part where you described Ethan's perception of Alice.
Her hair was silver-blonde, framing her freckled face like a curtain of satin. Today she wore retro sunglasses, a small tank top and shorts, with a charming smile fixed on her face. Alice held onto his hand tightly as he drove, trying to explain to him where she planned to travel...
Overall, it was an interesting read, thank you for entering, and thank you for getting it in so early! :D