I must say, when I saw how much writing this was, I was a bit intimidated. But I stuck through and read it all! First of all, I love the picture you put in the first chapter. It's great and does awesome things for the imagination. Linkin Park is pretty amazing, if I do say so. “I don't plan on sleeping with you.” Very blunt. I like it. The description of the girl is really good. I got such a clear picture. Libby and Eli. Nawww. I love the name Eli. This reminds a little of the book Blood Angel. Just the beginning of the book, because well, it's about Blood Angels and stuff. Also, the title is perfect for this. Wow, that suite sounds amazing. And yeah, I'm writing this comment as I read. Okay, they got married. Haha, Epic! And that hottub scene was like, sooo romantic. I really liked this, and I'm glad that I didn't chicken out of reading it. It was great. If you were to add more chapters, what would they be about?
First of all, I love the picture you put in the first chapter. It's great and does awesome things for the imagination.
Linkin Park is pretty amazing, if I do say so.
“I don't plan on sleeping with you.” Very blunt. I like it.
The description of the girl is really good. I got such a clear picture.
Libby and Eli. Nawww. I love the name Eli.
This reminds a little of the book Blood Angel. Just the beginning of the book, because well, it's about Blood Angels and stuff.
Also, the title is perfect for this.
Wow, that suite sounds amazing. And yeah, I'm writing this comment as I read.
Okay, they got married. Haha, Epic!
And that hottub scene was like, sooo romantic.
I really liked this, and I'm glad that I didn't chicken out of reading it.
It was great.
If you were to add more chapters, what would they be about?
:)