When I was reading this I noticed a number of minor grammar issues but those aren't a problem. I really liked how you spaced this one shot, I'm not a fan of Ke$ha but you worked very well with the lyrics. This story almost brought tears to my eyes because it's the story of my life right now, almost, except for some time differences and the fact that he isn't with some other girl still. I don't want he and I to say goodbye but there's not much I can do. I enjoyed reading this because I can relate to it. You know how to put emotion into your words and made me feel it, even if I wasn't going through the same thing, I would have felt it in your story. Great job!
February 15th, 2011 at 01:34am