July 8th, 2012 at 05:53am
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first off.... you really need a summary. people usually get turned off by a book when they don't know what it is about. trust me... you will get MANY more readers if you put a summary. they don't want to waste their time reading the first chapter and not like it. or they are too lazy to read the first chapter to know what it is about, and they might actually like it. so it can go both ways, but you will still lose readers.
second, people also get turned off by layout. i'm not one of those people, but trust me... people will not read a book if the layout is not what they are expecting. your story seems... i don't know... kind of mysterious. so your layout should match the mysteriousness.
third of all, i really like where this story is going. I like miranda and oscar. the only thing is that i feel miranda is more relatable to readers since she is described more than oscar.
but other than that, i don't think i found any mistakes. your plot is great, and if you put a summary, your book will be read by many, and liked by many as well, like me :D
you are a very talented author. never stop writing!
update soon.
first off.... you really need a summary. people usually get turned off by a book when they don't know what it is about. trust me... you will get MANY more readers if you put a summary. they don't want to waste their time reading the first chapter and not like it. or they are too lazy to read the first chapter to know what it is about, and they might actually like it. so it can go both ways, but you will still lose readers.
second, people also get turned off by layout. i'm not one of those people, but trust me... people will not read a book if the layout is not what they are expecting. your story seems... i don't know... kind of mysterious. so your layout should match the mysteriousness.
third of all, i really like where this story is going. I like miranda and oscar. the only thing is that i feel miranda is more relatable to readers since she is described more than oscar.
but other than that, i don't think i found any mistakes. your plot is great, and if you put a summary, your book will be read by many, and liked by many as well, like me :D
you are a very talented author. never stop writing!
update soon.