Hello My Name Is - Comments

I'm commenting on a third one of these just because they're so easy to gobble up! I actually think they're better than your long fiction by a long way, and would be better starts to long stories than the ones you use for your chaptered fictions.

Also, seriously, get a layout maker. I think your little collection could be really popular on here if you packaged it right. It would be a shame not to take advantage of that.

Well this seems new
I haven't read much like this before.

It's nice
I mean I love simple things at times and this is one of them
Sometimes simple things are more precious, depending really.
I love the quote as the summary, it drew me in.
I think this is the first time I have ever seen a Doughnut used as a(n) analogy.
Like seriously, you got a way with words.

I'm definately gonna read more
Keep up with the good work
<3

This is definitely different than most of what I've read on here. I loved the doughnut analogy. If I could have a doughnut, I would get a plain one too. >__> And ignorance is bliss, as they say, so I was rather glad the guy didn't have to face being sad about Macie dying when he had just divorced.

I also loved the way you said that he had divorced Becky. It was different, and it sounded... more bitter than sad, which is what I got from him. He's a bitter guy, isn't he? xD

Overall, great job, I definitely loved this story. :)

I find that I like the doughnut comparison. I'm wondering what would have happened if the girl would have picked the 'normal' doughnut instead of the sprinkles, what if he did go talk to her, and then asked her out for coffee two days later, and she had not found her husband cheating on her. I wonder a lot of things. (:

I like the story as a whole. (:

The quote intrigued me. What in the world could math problems, worries, and bubble gum have to do with this story, hmm? Perhaps I missed the point of that quote, but it caught my interest all the same, you know. The title helped, too. It's incredibly unique and roped me in. :)

Onward! <3

Unfortunately, she got the dog.

This made me giggle for some odd reason, and then I realized that it probably meant they got divorced. ): </3 That's sad, or at least, I think so, aha. It was a nice detail, however. A very interesting way of saying that. :)

Throughout the entirtey of this peice, I could tell you - or the main character - had a very dry sense of humor. Some of the parts made me giggle, but others honestly hurt my heart. That poor girl. ): </3

This story kind of reminded me of those movies, where the person has a chance to save someone who is going to die soon, and they do, except this has an interestinly unique - if not heart wrenching - ending.

The detail in this was nice and fluffy, even though to the point, and I liked that. I also liked the repetition of the name badges and doughnuts.

You did a nice job on this. :)<3
I'mma go back and re-read that quote, now.<3

I like this. Nothing I have seen beofre. Thankyou for the comment on my story :)
I did not find any errors, and I truly like your plot. Good work. :)

Oh, I quite like this...it's original, for sure, and even more than that your narrative voice is original too; fresh and amusing.
I do wish you had used commas just a teensy bit more often, because there were points where they were missing and it detracted a bit.
Overall, though, I really enjoyed this.
Cute banner, too :)

Unfortunately, she got the dog. I love how you used just that line to say that a divorce occurred. I'm a big fan of authors showing, not telling and this was a great example of that. I also really liked the analogy of the donut; that was a very unique way to illustrate the point. I think my favorite part of the story, however, was that bit at the end about the woman committing suicide. I guess it was ironic, since she apparently had the perfect life or the flavorful donut.

The only issue I had was the use of the word ya. I personally don't believe it looks right in stories but I understand if you were using it to convey how the character was talking. Overall, I really liked this story. (:

If this was Facebook, I'd like it :D

I love the doughnut analogy.

I like it, it's very simple and to the point.