March 2nd, 2014 at 09:45pm
Comment Swap! :)
I like this introduction so far. It grammatically correct as far as I can see and the spelling is as well. I would however, like to see you go more in depth with the voices and colorful haired girls. I understand that she was used to them at this point but what about when it first happened? You don't stay that calm. I don't know, maybe I just want it in there for my own selfish reasons haha. I would like to see where this story could go though! Keep writing!
I hope you update soon!