June 9th, 2012 at 06:03am
First of all, this layout is so simplistic and lovely that I could cry. (Sorry, took that a bit too far, but you get the point, hahaha.) I like the way everything matches so perfectly and nicely. So pretty! And I also like the slight creepiness of the summary; it kind of offsets the prettiness and feel of the story, and I really like that. Anyways, onto the review!
So far, the story seems so be beautifully written. I really do like the character’s names; Cordelia sounds so elegant and beautiful, while Ivan sounds brave and strong. It really adds a bit of something that I can’t really point my finger on to the characters. Very nice! I really like them. Oh, and the sandwich scene? So cute. It gives these characters even more character, haha.
I’m also fascinated by the change of pace and idea in the story; it goes from one of those lovely little stories that you rarely see floating around here to those completely awesome fantasy stories. I actually have a great fascination for myths and you really weaved this one into an almost unsuspecting story perfectly. I honestly didn’t expect her mother living under the sea for all this time, after everyone around her thought that she’d actually drowned. I’m hooked and amazed at the brilliance of this. <3
As the last few commentors have mentioned, this is the most originally beautiful story that I’ve read in a long while. I truly enjoyed it; it’s absolutely lovely and I hope that you’d continue this on, so that we may see what’ll go on between Cora and Poseidon. (;
Lovely job! <3
Reading it, the idea is intriguing. I'm interested already. I do want to note that you do seem to use a lot of repetitive words - 'water,' 'cottage,' and (though less so) 'lake,' for example.
Ohhhh, I do adore the underwater sequence. Very prettily written. Very visual. Also, why is her dead mother talking to her? Must continue reading.
OOH. POSEIDON STORY. GOOD THINGS. (Sorry. Automatic love of Poseidon stories.)
Everything about the description at this point is wonderful, actually. Really fun to read and visualize. And I adore the dialogue between Cora and Poseidon. Also, the backstory. I'm really impressed. I know I sound like a bit of a broken record at this point, but really, I am!
Oh my God, Aphrodite. This is exactly something she would do. This is awesome. I can't form a coherent review because this is awesome. Oh my god her characterization is perfect.
This is awesome. I can't. This is such an original and (surprising for a story about the Greek Gods) actually plausible. This is one of the most enjoyable things I've read in a long time. Thank you for writing it.
...awesome.