I really liked this :) Despite not having the slightest clue as to who Tom Fletcher is, I got a good sense of his character from how well your descriptions of each person were. I liked the odd socks girl, too :) She came across as quiet and not one of those horrid, loud, in-your-face groupies, which was important I think. The feeling the story carried of the gig being that of a mystic and strange experience for Tom wouldn't have worked so well if she wasn't exactly how you described her to be.
Your grammar is very good :D It was refreshing haha Also, your layout was lovely and related to the topic quite well. I used to have purple striped socks those colours lol
The only thing I can really pick at is that you didn't follow this rule: Your one-shot must include the object, colour, and front man as separate things. For example, if you choose green and an iron, you cannot just include a green iron and use that for both choices. If you choose odd socks, the front man cannot be wearing them. Etc.
But, I still enjoyed reading :D Winners will be posted once all entries are in :)
March 16th, 2011 at 03:21pm
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Despite not having the slightest clue as to who Tom Fletcher is, I got a good sense of his character from how well your descriptions of each person were.
I liked the odd socks girl, too :) She came across as quiet and not one of those horrid, loud, in-your-face groupies, which was important I think. The feeling the story carried of the gig being that of a mystic and strange experience for Tom wouldn't have worked so well if she wasn't exactly how you described her to be.
Your grammar is very good :D It was refreshing haha
Also, your layout was lovely and related to the topic quite well. I used to have purple striped socks those colours lol
The only thing I can really pick at is that you didn't follow this rule:
Your one-shot must include the object, colour, and front man as separate things. For example, if you choose green and an iron, you cannot just include a green iron and use that for both choices. If you choose odd socks, the front man cannot be wearing them. Etc.
But, I still enjoyed reading :D
Winners will be posted once all entries are in :)