Ignore the comment above. This was perfect. It flowed very nicely and the word choice was perfect for the mood. I don't think there was anything wrong. Flawless as always, dru, love.
July 10th, 2011 at 10:29am
I felt the summary didn't exactly fit this, the title and summary imply this is a pot-fic where that is the main attention but I never really felt it throughout the piece. The time line threw me off in the summary as well as it isn't mentioned in the story itself.
I felt that this piece lacked description and that got in the way of the flow of the piece. Even just a few words thrown in here and now would have helped the piece, or a slightly different choice of language as I felt it was very stiff and the emotions weren't really there.
