I liked this a lot. The layout was easy and the picture fit perfectly with the story. I like the title of your story as well, it gave me a clear idea of what the story was going to be about.
I thought your entry was very emotional, and it made me feel really lonely when i read it, i just felt so gone. You really expressed the emotion thought the main character and i thought that was very well done.
The only thing I wasn't sure about was the dream she had, i thought it took away from the theme. I thought it would have been better if you had stuck with just the memories.
On the other hand, i loved how with each memory she was causing herself more pain, how she just needed to be free from the torment that, that day was putting her through.
I think you did really well with your entry, and i don't think i spotted any major punctuation errors. Your story was simple and easy to read and it flowed very well.
I thought your entry was very emotional, and it made me feel really lonely when i read it, i just felt so gone. You really expressed the emotion thought the main character and i thought that was very well done.
The only thing I wasn't sure about was the dream she had, i thought it took away from the theme. I thought it would have been better if you had stuck with just the memories.
On the other hand, i loved how with each memory she was causing herself more pain, how she just needed to be free from the torment that, that day was putting her through.
I think you did really well with your entry, and i don't think i spotted any major punctuation errors. Your story was simple and easy to read and it flowed very well.
Thank you for your entry, and well done x